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Name: granpa harry (Signed) · Date: 21/01/13 4:13 PM · Chapter: One

sort of a nice story.

But you made Vernon look so good in this one.

I was half expecting him to go up stairs and tell Dudley that he would let him go but it Petunia who wouldn't allow it.

GH



Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 28/08/08 10:55 PM · Chapter: One
What a slimeball. I can see why you chose him for that challenge, I hate his guts, too. You did write him with the proper amount of shrewd nastiness. Only Vernon would turn something like that into points with both his wife and his son in his favor. The comment about saving his frustration to take out on Harry made me want to drop kick him. This is a really good one-shot.


Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 25/08/08 10:09 AM · Chapter: One
It's sad, but I can see this happening in the Dursley household. Petunia coddling Dudley, Vernon pretending not to, it's amazing to me that despite all the pampering and spoiling that Dudley even began to remotely turn into a human being in the 7th book. Sometimes people are able to overcome the overindulgences in life though, I like to think that Dudley did.

My one issue with this story, is Vernon threatening to sell the tickets on the internet. The internet was not that popular when the books were taking place, perhaps toward the end of the books, but I get the impression this story is taking place earlier in the series. Not really a big deal, but something that stood out to me.


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