Reviews For Salem

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 11:48 PM · Chapter: The Witching Hour
This is done ina very different style. The imagery is very deep, with the thief and the girl. I love how you never offer the man's name, but we can figure it out for ourselves. I wonder how many different opinions you've been given? The sonnet at the end is simply amazing. Very beautiful.

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 27/08/08 2:49 PM · Chapter: The Witching Hour

First things first, that sonnet... AMAZING!  Truly lovely.  Next,  If her life were to be unraveled, I would not be the one to pull the thread, the imagery in that line was also amazing, it really stood out to me.  Sometimes, Gub, I think you are entirely too smart for your own good (okay, more times than not ;o).  I spent the first 3/4 of this story completely and utterly confused... which I'm pretty sure was your intention, so well done!  And while keeping the reader is guessing can be fun at times, it might turn off others, so you might want to make things more obvious a tad sooner. 

This line:  “Are you scarred enough, girl?”  Is that supposed to be scarred, or scared?  I think either works, but scared seems more appropriate. Great job though!

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