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Name: serendip (Signed) · Date: 21/09/2008 03:34 am · Chapter: Number One
PIPPI. HAI.
Well, I've never written Bellatrix, in fact, I can't say I've ever read her, but you're right. This is how I imagine she'd act like, and be. So kudos for that.
I loved the line about Tighty-whities. xD Seriously, it made me snort. Which wasn't so dignified, but hey, no one else saw. It's just a secret between you and me, yes? xD
So, she was in love with Lucius? Eww. But that's probably because...I don't like Lucius. Lucious Lucius. xD Microsoft Word always changes it to that on my computer. Well, it changes Lucius to Luscious. xD
Aw, Pips. I loved this. It was short, yes, but concise and straight to the point. :]

-Ali

-cough- Pipcooke please?


Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 19/09/2008 11:19 pm · Chapter: Number One
Ahhh, so it's even better with the tense problems fixed ;P ;) As you know, I really like this! It's an interesting start that leaves enough unsaid to make the reader wonder, and the narrator's easy to get into. And it's just as entertaining the second time around. Very nice, and I hope you'll update it soon!

Blaire


Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 19/09/2008 08:11 pm · Chapter: Number One
This is quite a mature piece.  I think you've got Bella's attitude down very well.  I like the way you portray her and you've done first person very well, too.  I look forward to seeing where you take this.


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