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Name: reallyginny (Signed) · Date: 15/05/2008 08:25 pm · Chapter: Chapter 2

It was a very poignant moment when Severus was forced to walk away from a sobbing Lily; the first of so many of his sacrifices. 

"Her every bit of happiness was wrapped up in someone who would always have to hide his feelings or die."

A very astute observation that sums up the difficulties Severus and Lily would face as a couple.  Overall this was well-written with just a few POV problems occasionally; I do hope you'll be continuing your story.

 

 



Name: reallyginny (Signed) · Date: 15/05/2008 08:01 pm · Chapter: Chapter 1

Your story certainly adds a new element to the Severus/Lily relationship. The dichotomy of a newly-initiated Death Eater going directly from taking the Dark Mark to the arms of his Muggle-born lover was interesting, but perhaps a bit out of character for both.  I'm very interested to read more, just to see where the story arc is headed.

I thought this was a particularly deft piece of writing:

“You asked the wrong question earlier. You shouldn’t have asked me if I wanted you dead.” She shook her head. “You should have asked yourself if you want me dead.”

Sent a shiver down my back...



Name: justlikemagic (Signed) · Date: 21/02/2008 01:27 pm · Chapter: Chapter 2

Wooah ... again, this was heartbreakingly beautiful. You have the Marauders spot on, and that's a big achievement to get me to say that when I adore them and they're bullies in this! But they WERE bullies, and seeing it from Sev and Lily's point of view just emphasises that. When James said, "Think you're funny, do you?" I don't know why, but that really strongly reminded me of Draco in one of the films. Whether it was intentional or not, it added another dimension to that part, and I liked it. But really, really, amazing chapter. Please say you're not stopping here! You have this brilliant way of getting inside your characters, and then making the reader feel everything they are. When James is beating up Sev, I want to scream at him, when Lily's crying on her own, I want to go and cry with her ... this is excellent.

10/10, again. I love it. And I really hope there's going to be another chapter soon :)



Author's Response:

No, I'm not stopping here, there is a long way to go. I'm unsure if I make this a canon ending or a AU ending yet, but the journey for Sev and Lily has only just begun. I think I had Draco in mind when I wrote that line...It's from the first movie, where he introduces himself to Harry and says that line when Ron laghs at Draco's name!

I can just see James as that arrogant little pig, picking on my poor Sev :( I'm also happy that you feel that I have the Marauders right...I was a bit worried about that as I don't have much experience in writing their characters. But we'll see how I go :)

Again, I'm glad you felt the emotion of the characters..It's important to the story that you do, as this won't be a happy, fluffy piece, although, there may be moments ;)

Again, thank you so much for reviewing. More will come as soon as I can get it up :) I'm also glad you liked it! 



Name: justlikemagic (Signed) · Date: 21/02/2008 01:10 pm · Chapter: Chapter 1

Helleoooo! I'm heere! :D First of all, let me say how much I love Severus/Lily, so I was going all SQUEEE when I saw your request :P

Now onto the story, and all trace of SQUEEing is gone. This was absolutely stunning. It broke my heart to bits, but was done so elegantly along the way. From the very start, when Severus was trying to tell her something was up, even though their romance was so sweet and so pure and so perfect, I was preparing myself for something really bad.

And then you hit us with it! He's a Death Eater, and that's got to be the end of all Sev/Lily. EXCEPT I really hope it's not. Because the way you portray their relationship is so ... astounding, really. All the way through, I couldn't spot a word that sounded awkward or out of place, and the way you wield your language creates all these emotions, and really, Elena, it's amazing. You did an excellent job of making me cry.

I'm so glad this isn't just a one-shot. I'll get right over to the next chapter, so expect me back soon ;) Oh - wait, did I really forget to say I straight away gave you 10/10?!



Author's Response:

Awwwww Em *huggle* Thank you so much. I'm so glad you got wrapped up in the emotion of the story as that was what I'm trying to do. I'm not sure how I will end this story, but there is a long way to go before things end.

I'm sorry I made you cry, but YAY too!! When I had this idea, I couldn't make it a one shot. There's too much to this tale to end it. So there is more, but that will come shortly :) 



Name: Jessi (Signed) · Date: 17/02/2008 06:50 pm · Chapter: Chapter 1
*gasp* Marissa! That is terribly sad! Amazing, mind you - with Severus/Lily and everything, but so, so, so sad! I seriously choked up when he revealed his mark. Poor Lily!!!! Poor Sev, too... but Lily, the poor girl. To love someone that much and then to have to face that they are on an opposing side...

The ending was perfect, with Severus's vow to protect her. And then his proclamation of love. It's so moving and powerful and *wells up* sad!!

I loved it - seriously, loved it. And I love you!!! *huggleglompsquishy* Thank you so much for the beautiful story and the tears!! I know I can always count on you to make me cry.


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