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Reviews For Father Figure

Name: BKL8008 (Signed) · Date: 29/01/09 4:39 PM · Chapter: Chapter 1

Both Snape and Dumbledore are well captured and in character. The idea of Snape recognizing his own tortured past in a current student is a marvelous plot idea.

My only problem was this: She began to cry.  Severus’ heart broke. 

Why? That's a bit rushed and somewhat out of character for Snape. Just a bit more detail, a short reminisce, would make it so much the better. 

 Other than that, I very much enjoyed it.



Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm glad you thought I portrayed Dumbledore and Snape well.  I also see what you mean about the part I wrote being a bit rushed or writing it another way.  I really appreciate you suggestion.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

 



Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 26/01/09 12:45 AM · Chapter: Chapter 1

Albus always get the last word and he's usually right, when he's not talking in circles.  The brat!

And Severus really is a good guy, as much as he'd prefer for people to think otherwise.  Bless his little heart.

"All's well that ends well."

Cute little story.



Author's Response:

Glad you felt I captured Dumbledore and Snape's more positive traits.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

 



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