The blending of Arthurian myth and the Potterverse works extremely well in this chapter. I love your dialogue between the Founders and the idea that Hogwarts was built on Merlin's castle.
I'm sorry I didn't get a chance to finish this challenge myself, but extremely glad to find your story.
Thanks so much. I really wanted to get this done and finished in time for the challenge end date, but I've got too many WIPs that are calling my name. I'm glad you enjoyed this first chapter. I can tell you that every chapter will have a different style, but they will all be part of the story.
Having Hogwarts built on Merlin's castle is important. Everything in this will tie back to Arthurian myth, even if it's not obvious at times. I have a plan for this, but I'm not always going to spell it out. And I think the end chapter will surprise everyone who knows what I write. It won't be my normal ships and favourite characters.
I appreciate your review and your kind words.
Okay . . THAT explains a lot about old Lucius . . even if YOU made it up, it fits with JKR's Lucius just perfectly! This is getting REALLY interesting . . when's the next season rolling around?? Oh, it'll be Harry& comapny's turn next, right? . . okay . .bring it on!
Oh, speaking of okay . . I don't think Lucius, being the 'high bred' boy that he was, would have said "Father!" he called "Are you okay?" he'd have said "Father! he called "Are you alright?" Just a thought.
Hmmm, you are probably right about Lucius and the way he speaks. I wanted it to be more formal. I'm going to look at how Draco speaks in the books and have Lucius speak like Draco (if Draco says all right, then I'll change it, but if he says okay, then I'll keep it).
Yeah, I wanted this chapter to be more about the family side of the Malfoys, rather than the Dark Arts side. I'm not started yet on the next chapter, but I do have the plot ready for it. I'm sorry I'm slow lately, but work is full-time right now and it's dragging me down. Next chapter is Hogwarts era, but it won't be Harry who's the star of the chapter. It'll be a main character that I've only written as a minor character so far; and my favourite character as a supporting character.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter, too.
Very intriging start of this four season story.
Interesting, very interesting, and I've expostulated the 'line of Morgaine' already in my head . . let's see if I'm right . . on to chapter 2!
Thanks so much for the review. I realize this is a very short chapter. The chapters will most likely get longer as I write this story. You probably are right about who the heir of Morgaine is, but I have some surprises in store. Glad you enjoyed this.
Better and better! I really like this twist. Even though it's meant to be short, this storyline just screams for the full treatment! Can't wait 'til the next season.
Thanks so much for the nice review and I'm sorry it's been taking me so long to update stories. I'm really trying to leave a lot of stuff 'between the lines' by making it short. I think you'll be surprised at the next chapter. I'm thinking it will have to be considerably longer and it will feature my favourite character to write.
I had always wanted to write this as a novel, but I really think this format suits it better and I love that Alopex came up with this challenge.
Thanks again for the kind words and the review. Reviews like yours keep me wanting to write.
I really, really like this concept. I would love to see this in more detail, perhaps novel length.
I have read the first chapter twice, and I already want to know more: who is the boy? Will Slytherin talk to him, even? How much of the Castle is done?
One thing that I would need, though, and suggest, is a bit of brush-up on the myths upon which it's based. Just in passing, you know.
All in all, I am glad I didn't skip one. It's a fascinating idea. I do so enjoy the characterization of ol' Salazar so far, too.
I've actually done quite a bit of research on the Arthurian myths on which I'm basing this and I discovered there are a great deal of conflicting stories from the earliest ones to the way they changed with 'Morte D'Arthur' and even after that. It gives me a great deal of latitude in what I'm doing.
I deliberately left the first chapter vague because the next chapter will delve more into the modern, into the Marauder's Era (but not the Marauders themselves).
I'm glad you enjoyed Salazar's characterization. I hadn't intended on flashing back to them again, but I might now that I think about it. There will be flashbacks to Merlin and Vivian again, so I don't see why not flashbacks to the Founders, too. You gave me something to think about.
I can't go novel length with this because of the constraints of the challenge. Four chapters, one for each season;one for each of four Eras (Founders, Marauders, Hogwarts/Post-Hogwarts, Next-Gen; and a specific concept pair for each of the four chapters.
Thank you so much for the kind words in your review, the CC, and the food for thought.