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Name: BKL8008 (Signed) · Date: 04/01/14 9:34 PM · Chapter: Chapter 6

Normally I don't read AU or non-canon stories, however, this one looked interesting and I thougth I'd give it a go. I like the way things are slightly different, and I can see Harry actually turning out like this. I always thought the well-adjusted family man thing in canon just didn't work for him. I hope you continue with this one. Sorry it's taken me so long to find it.



Author's Response:

thanks

there was NO way he could become Normal family man

to much had happened early in life



Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 02/07/10 8:26 PM · Chapter: Chapter 4

AH HA! so that's how it happened . . . so Aurors were tracking the Death Eaters who were tracking Romilda . . . DO you think Harry will remember him when he shows up for his exam . . will she get her answers then, or has Romilda already filled her in on the Wizarding world . . . this is getting GOOD!!!!!

Not to brag, but when you have time ( a lot of time- it's two NOVEL length stories and a one shot ) have a look at my stories  and especially " That day in Diagon Alley".  Great minds run in similar circles!



Author's Response:

I would love to have a beta look over my work, I have to try and figure out how it can happen.

As you can tell, I am a bit Laxidazicle (old word probably spelled wrong) on my 4-6 grade grammer rules.

Kids nowadays don't have those classes, do they?

Thrilled to get so many reviews all at once. I will try and read your stories asap.

I was still trying to come up with a name for his owl, any suggestions would be helpful.



Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 02/07/10 8:20 PM · Chapter: Chapter 3

Whoa!, so she's using magic to cover the evidence of what the Death Eaters did to her . . .  I think that's very clever of her ( and you ).

No girlfriend???? what happened to Ginny??? will you let us in on that angle of the story?

Here's the one boo-boo that made me crazy - HE!HE!HE!  quick peak.    peek



Author's Response:

thanks for the review



Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 02/07/10 8:12 PM · Chapter: Chapter 2

Romilda is an interesting character to use for this, enough 'history' with Harry for him to trust her, but not so familiar with everything he'd been through to have any preconceived notions . . . good professional ethic.

Okay, on to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the positive response to her ethics, we don't see enough of it nowadays.

I was wondering about the 'Graphic' nature of the story which makes it MA18+.

I didn't want to literally describe the attack or the romantic nature of the first visit.

But I wanted the reader to use their own imagination and life experience to fill in the the blanks.

Then they hopefully had a picture in their head of the scenes, maybe just a little more than they are used to.

Kind of what Harry will go through during his sessions with Romilda. 



Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 02/07/10 8:05 PM · Chapter: Chapter 1

Well, the idea for your story is intriguing and I'm going to continue on with the other chapters you have posted, but, and this is where the grammar/spelling/punctuation/canon nazi in my comes out . . . so

It's Grimmauld Place . . . naughty, naughty getting THAT wrong!

The neighborhood kids had started trying to feed it. To the surprise of their parents. Who had never noticed the lamppost before    should be one sentence, with commas, and you have many more chopped up sentences that should be joined . . .  The neighborhood kids had stated trying to feed it, to the surprise of their parents who had never noticed . . .

Might I suggest having your chapter checked by one of the betas here on GF before posting

apart buy trolls playing tug a war.   spelling/typo  apart by trolls

but I'll leave this to you to re-check . . I'll just keep reading and ignore any boo-boos . . . unless they make me crazy . . . .  just ask Datbenik513 . . .I'm ruthless!!!  HE!HE!HE!



Author's Response:

sometimes when I read it forward I think I am reading it backwards.



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