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Name: BKL8008 (Signed) · Date: 03/03/14 5:28 PM · Chapter: Chapter 3: Mother and Daughter

It's got some good ideas, and I think it's just fine. You have to have a somewhat slow chapter for exposition and to get things moving along now and then.

Borderline on the mooshiness, though! I liked the bit about the rectal bleeding spell! Priceless!



Author's Response:

Another experimental chapter, this time on Mrs. Granger, whom we haven't seen in the movies AT ALL. I also can't recall the Grangers in any of the books, except being mentioned by Hermione.
This is a somewhat preparatory chapter to the story being unfolded.

Once again, thanks for your support.



Name: BKL8008 (Signed) · Date: 13/02/14 3:01 PM · Chapter: Chapter 2: A Tonksy Little Problem

Loved the ending! And the aside of a day out with Tonks is believable and very nice to read. Great work.



Author's Response:

I'm following Natalia Tena on Twitter and Facebook, and some of her one-liners tend to crack me up. I always imagined Tonks the same witty, loyal, strong person as Natalia, so this somewhat experimental chapter wasn't too hard to write.

Thanks for your time to R&R.



Name: BKL8008 (Signed) · Date: 13/02/14 2:54 PM · Chapter: Another Lonely Night

An interesting and well-done aside. I do like the things you've mentioned here, and find it unfortunate that JKR didn't do some stuff like this in the canon. Very good read.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your continued support to my scribbles.

I guess many of us do have these or similar questions, at least those who read between the lines. Too many untied ends, unexplained things in the seven books. 



Name: SiriuslyPeeved (Signed) · Date: 17/07/10 12:35 PM · Chapter: Another Lonely Night
Great first chapter: I really can't blame Harry for his actions toward Vernon. I think the tone of this chapter is spot on and you did a very good job with the pacing and rhythm.

The possessive of Bellatrix should be Bellatrix's: this bit of punctuation trips me up as well! :)

Those are certainly some pointed questions that Harry poses to Hermione about Dumbledore's actions.... I'm intrigued to see how you'll answer them in this AU!

Author's Response:

Dear SP,

Huge thanks for this lovely review. Those questions have been bugging me for a while and I needed to put them down in a row.

I will still have to see whether I will be continuing this story; at this point I have some serious questions whether or not I should be writing an altenate HBP as well :D

Enjoy your weekend,

Zoltan



Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 09/07/10 7:03 PM · Chapter: Another Lonely Night

Well, this story starts off where it all goes south for the Wizarding world . . . HE!HE!HE!, . . . can't wait to see the twists and turns in the trails you send this hids down in this one!

BOO-BOO time:

machinally sipping from his Butterbeer in small gulps.  I think you mean methodically, as you have Harry taking deliberate sips frrom his last butterbeer.

a drawing, a strikingly resembling portrait of Harry   shuffle them around and it flows better:  a drawing, a striking portrait of Harry, a good resemblance.

As always, it's up to you to take or leave my suggestions . . . you know me, I'm easy! HE!HE!HE!  Picky and OCD but easy!



Author's Response:

I can't believe I've missed out on these reviews! * hides his head in the sand in shame *

Yeah, as I was watching HBP, I got this idea and simply HAD to start this story. On the other hand, I'm not sure I should continue at this point, or rather I'm not sure I should be rewriting the whole saga. I already have a post-Battle fic, an alternate DH; should I really begin with an alternate HBP?

As always, million thanks for the corrections. * bows humbly *

Take care,

Zoltan



Name: BKL8008 (Signed) · Date: 07/07/10 4:25 PM · Chapter: Another Lonely Night

Interesting take on this particular interim time period. I think you captured Harry's frame of mind quite well. You also raise questions that I have often wondered about, too. Good job!



Author's Response:

Welcome back, BKL, and thanks for the nice review.

The story doesn't end here, it's only a still somewhat messed-up intro chapter. Basically, until a certain point (most probably one more chapter LOL) I WILL stick to canon. After that, AU all the way. You know me :D

Those questions raised, however, will play a VERY important part in the story.



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