There is a lot to love in this opening chapter! You've written some great visuals and intriguing details; I especially liked the "Bite" and "Bark" tattoos which play on the old saying "His bark is worse than his bite" and also weave in the Hunt mythology. You have some good, distinctive characters developed here, with a definite voice for each of them. I look forward to reading more!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for the review. I really wasn't sure if I wanted to post this or not, since it's sort of a stand-alone and I might not get back to it with follow-up chapters. I'm glad you liked the visuals and details like his tattoos. I tried to put in a few clues that Caleb's not a nice guy either.
I really think I'll like developing oc's now that I understand more how to do it.
Again, thanks for the encouragement and kind words.
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