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Remember Me by Elena

Rated: R15+ • 5 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Moving on with your life after a loved one has past is hard, trying to live your life and remembering your loved one, all the time, is harder. Ginny fights a battle within herself to keep a promise to Harry while trying to move on with her life. Her promise is holding her back, yet she doesn't want to let Harry down. Will she forever stay trapped somewhere between the past and her future, or will she say goodbye to Harry once and for all? For Jessi_Rose, as she wanted to read stories that would make her cry.


Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Remember Me

As I mentioned in earlier post, this story made me cry from the first sentence. Even as I re-read it.  Partly because I feared Harry would die in DH and was so happy he hadn't.  Yet your version provides the idea that it was very possible for him to die along with Voldy.  I worried that JK would kill Harry because she tended to mirror ideas from the Bible. I thought she would have him die as though sacrificed for all of us like Jesus (but I'm sure she would have heard alot of flack from the religious on that comparison ;) )

Anyway, the idea of him dying is an emotional thing for me (cause you know I LOVE him) but mainly because I worried that there would be no one to remember him.  He had no family who loved him who would visit his grave. And too many times even our own loved ones are only visited on Holidays. 

Ginny tried to visit often and to remember him as he requested. But even that became difficult as life moved on and visits became monthly. Maybe she misinterpreted his request. I don't believe Harry would ever intend for her to not move on in life. But maybe to just keep a bit of him in her heart and memory. Maybe that is why everyone got on her case cause they knew Harry wouldn't want her to die (inside) because of him as you state.

Seamus was a bit of a stretch for me, but hey, this is your story.  Because I'm hooked on the Ginny/Harry concept it's hard to imagine her with anyone else.

Lovely, emotional exploration into Ginny's anquish.  But I'm so happy that JK didn't kill him off ;)



Author's Response:

LOL - You Canon lovers make me laugh ;)

Yes, it is true that Harry wouldn't have wanted her to hold on so tight. This was Ginny's way...Its not the only way, but I think it was just her way. Holding on to what she had and not wanting it to die. Remembering the words she was made to promise, but taking them too literally, because she can't move past his death. 

Seamus...Well, I think it could be anyone aside from him, but it was nice to give Ginny someone to move on to. Not because she had to have someone, but to remind her that SHE was still alive and she could still feel and live and love and be happy. 



After Death Did Us Part by morgana

Rated: R12+ • 4 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star
Summary:

Thanks to Joanne K for the great banner and to Elena for her patience and help with how to post images. A young witch roams a semi-deserted sandy beach in Normany on Valentine's Day. She reflects. Despite her love ones' efforts to distract her, everything around her is a painful reminder of the love she once had, of what eternity took away from her...

For anyone reading Harry Potter and the Mysteries Unveiled, this story is not necessarily connected, so it's not meant to be a spoiler.
Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/01/09 Title: Chapter 1: After Dead Did Us Part

There are a few errors I'd like to address. Some are personal opinions (which you can choose to ignore- as you are the writer of this lovely story) Others are spelling errors which you might want to correct.

Chapter Title: is listed as "After Dead Did Us Part"  you might want to change to match Story title.

"Her brother and his fiancée..." should be fiancé

"Hermione realised at once that the two women were making provision for her and Ron to spend time on their own,"  should be spelled realized.

It had been after all a most beautiful day, when they got married,"  personal opinion to maybe change to "when they were married,"

"Molly, at that point, suggested that they got back indoors, that the weather was not right for the little one," personal opinion to change to "get back indoors"

"as if fuelled by a magical force" should be spelled fueled

"what the town has lost in commerce, has gained in tranquillity.”  should be spelled tranquility.

"Ginny kneeled by one of the side naves" personal opinion to consider using 'knelt' instead.

 "she was losing her marbles, losing him had finally got to her!"  maybe use "finally gotten to her.' but I can see your version reading properly also, using 'gotten' is a personal opinion based on the way I talk and you know how we Yanks trash the English language ;)

"On their arrival, they found them already there over a pot of coffee." This sentence doesn't sound right. Maybe change to "they found them already waiting there sharing a pot of coffee."

Ok, now onto the review... This is such a sad, bitter-sweet tale of Ginny losing her spouse.  I dreaded getting to the end of DH and finding that JK killed my beloved Harry, I mean, Ginny's beloved Harry.  I'm so glad she didn't. Your story delves into the feelings Ginny would have had, had that unfortunate event occurred.  How does one move on after the death or loss of someone who consumes your heart as I'm sure Harry consumed Ginny's.  As we all know, Harry would never have wanted Ginny to wallow in sadness.  He would have wanted her to move on and eventually find love and happiness again. 

I have a feeling you have been to this beach and walked it's shores, visiting cafes and pondering your life and the unexpected turns it has taken.  I love walking the beach at the Jersey shore and hearing the waves pound the sand. It can be quite therapeudic and was glad to see Ginny healing with the help of the waves and sounds of the shore.

I was shocked to read that you gave Harry's son red hair instead of black.  Still characteristically unruley though.

This story gave me a sense of peace while reading it knowing that time really does move on. Maybe not quite as you originally pictured it but it marches on just the same buffering the sorrow and the pain as it passes.

Thanks for sharing this lovely story.  I enjoyed reading and reviewing for you.

 



 

 



Author's Response: Oh, thanks sooo much! I loved this review! You are so throrough as well. Yes, I missed a few typos and spelling errors here, got should definitely have been "get" and I prefer "when they were married" to even if they are both correct but your version is more elegant. Now realize is the US English version of realise, so I'll leave it the British way since that's what I'm familiar with. Many people have pointed this out throughout my writing though! Now, when the author is American I never try to put it into British English because I feel there is no right or wrong there. The same goes for "got" instead of "gotten" but you knew this. lol Now, onto the content. Jessi set up a Valentine's challenge last year and I was going through the break up of a long relationship so I didn't feel like writing something totally happy. As you know, I love Harry to bits and I thought I could feel Ginny's emotions in the circumstances. Now, the baby was my insurance policy in case JKR killed Harry! (Am I sad or what? lol) Like you I thought there was a 50/50 chance of this happening. Of course, since HP is supposed to be a children's series, they would not have had the baby, unless this scene was set well after DH, because Ginny would be about 17 here (mind you age of consent in the UK is 16, but still... - the beauty of being able to write mature!) I'm toying with the idea of using this baby in another story (well, when he is about 11). So, the red hair shocked you! lol Well, I thought that he had to have characteristics of both and the red hair gene seems very strong in the Weasley family but of course he has untidy hair and his eyes are just like Harry's (he had to have Harry's eyes!) Yes, you guess right, I have been to that French town and I love it. Also, when I was writing it, I recalled that Hermione and her parents used to take holidays in France so I thought it would very quite plausible for them to have a holiday home there. Ginny is obviously not quite ready to move on just yet but yes, Harry would have wanted for her to be happy and yes, time can be a healer but not a very fast one. Of course, I love their love story. I know a lot of fans think that their relationship came very much out of the blue but, personally, I see it as something very profound. In my main story, Ginny knows exactly what can happen and what she is getting herself into... how hurt she could be in the end... but well, if I had been in her shoes, I would have still married him anyway! Lovely, lovely review. I must fix those errors now, though. x



Salvation Has a Name by Georgia Weasley

Rated: MA18+ • 4 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary: Banner by chiQs09 at eHPF. Beautiful job, love!

Salvation banner

Sirius Black finally flees from Grimmauld Place and the abuse he suffers at the hands of his mother. Where will he go? The only place he has ever found acceptance.
Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 18/11/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very nicely done. I'm seeing a connection between Harry's situation and Sirius'. Harry found a 2nd home with the Weasleys and Sirius with the Potters. A home that they probably both wished they had growing up but were deprived of for similar but varying reasons. They each found a family who would accept and love them. It was also nice to see the bond with James & Sirius. I can see Sirius being a loner when he was younger to come to Hogwarts and find a best friend in James. Again, like Harry and his friendship with Ron. When you find a friend who will stand up with you through thick and thin it's a bond like kinship but even stronger.

You have a way of getting into a character's head and putting it writing in just the right way. I also liked the part when James arrived and showed Sirius affection while still in dog form. Again so much like Harry. It's amazing how both characters turned out so well even though deprived of basic affection for so long in their life.

Author's Response: I think the issues of tragic childhoods were very much a theme for JK. She contrasted Harry and Sirius with Severus and Voldemort's situations, showing how two went one way and the other two went darker and twisted. Snape came around, but was still bitter and broken. I really wanted to show the bond that caused Sirius to just be led away after witnessing James's death. He'd lost the reason to fight without a family. I try to get inside their heads, and also JK's, to try and shed light on a certain situation. I always want to keep them canon, because that's why I do this. I just wanted to continue my little Harry Potter addiction, and she had the nerve to end the series! *Hugs to you* for reviewing! Thanks Judy!



What Goes Around…Comes Around… by Holly Ilex

Rated: MA18+ • Feature 112 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Awarded Best Novel Length in Gluttony's Pure Indulgence Awards, 2008.

The new Defense Against the Dark Arts teacher...Neville's free spirited Godmother...The love of Severus Snape's life...All the same woman?

The arrival of Anastasia Twigg-Jones at Hogwarts sets into motion a year of intrigue, revenge, laughter, secrets, love and murder that reaches into the past and impacts everyone's future.

Let's 'hang around' and watch the sparks and spells fly, shall we?


Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 21/11/08 Title: Chapter 1: PROLOGUE

Nice beginning. I enjoyed reading this. I will continue to read bit by bit but give me time 50+ chapters, YIKES!!!

Is Anna Twig a Rowling character from Marauder period or is this one of your OC's? I think this is the first Marauder theme story I've ever read. I've been hooked on Dramione's. Some are just too juicy. My bad. So you are broadening my horizons.

Author's Response:

Anna is an OC.  Let me give you my reasoning for this story.  I kept thinking that despite the fact that Baldie Voldie "picked & marked Harry as his equal", that didn't make Neville an less of a wizard.  Despite his being a bit of a dork, he's a very powerful, smart, quick minded guy who EVERYONE has and will underestimate - to their peril . . . as BV found out when Neville sliced off Nagini's head! 

ANYWAY, I was thinking ( this was right after PoA ) . . . what if Neville had a Godmother . . . and what if she'd been at school with Harry's parents but wound up an Auror and worked with Neville's parents . . . and what if, for the 6th year, Albus recruits her to be the D.A.D.A. teacher . . . and believe me, it just snowballed from there.  The strangest things happened when I was writing this story, too. (I'll PM you the list!) and I came up with the EPILOGUE in the middle of writing the first story!

ALthough it's not a true Marauder's story, it brings all of those people back together - at least the survivors . . . and then some . . . you'll see.  SO, take your time, enjoy and welcome to MY world!

 



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 21/11/08 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2 : Oh, by the way . . .

Why are you calling it the Defense Association instead of Dumbledore's Army?

I'm still reading and enjoying so far. There is alot of information to acquire so it will take some time to get into the flow and see where this is going.

Aunt Anna sounds like quite a character. It will be interesting to see what goes on with Snape. Hmmm. Obviously this is not a Marauder story at all but it was a set up to the future story to come. Hmmm.

I only have an issue with the flow of the sentence "The kids jumped up and watched the sofas..." It's probably a personal issue but I had a hard time with the flow. I'll keep reading and keep reviewing!!

Author's Response:

Well, let's consider this . . . where do you live?  I'm in Maryland, USA and I write like I talk, so, that's the flow of my brain waves. . . . HE!HE!HE!

As you didn't stop to review until the end of chapter 2, it seems I have you hooked! Yippee!  Have fun and watch out for my cliffies - I'm a real stinker with those puppies!

HE!HE!HE!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 22/11/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 : Welcome to Hogwarts

Sorry, I accidentally missed this chapter. I got timed out while leaving the review on the Prologue so I had to back up, sign back in and rewrite the review. When I picked the next chapter I presumed I had already read Chapter 1 which was actually the Prologue which I had read. So I've backed up and re-read.

Once I knew the backstory of the prophecy I too thought Neville would have an important part in the end of Voldemort. I liked how Rowling gave Neville the improved confidence. It will be interesting to see how you give Neville that step up.

I'm still not far enough into the story yet. I like the explanation regarding Marietta's betrayal. I'm curious about Luna's relationship with Neville. I originally thought they would hook up but Rowling had other plans.

I'll keep reading.

Author's Response:

Yeah, I thought Luna and Neville would wind up together, too.  And in this story they do, sort of . . . little spats, etc.

Well, Cho got the blame in the movie, which I thought stunk!  But I couldn't let the kids be mad at Marietta, especially after they found out how underhanded old Delores had been when interrogating them, so that's the reasoning behind this scene. The first 6 chpaters cover the first 24 hours , then 2 for the first DADA class, then 2 for Hogsmeade weekend, then 2 for Halloween , 2 for November and the Slytherins, then the 'talk' Anna promises Harry (3 chapters ) then the holidays and the all hell breaks loose

HAVE FUN!

HE!HE!HE!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 22/11/08 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 : Do I Make Myself Clear?

What do they always say? Give a book 3 chapters before you decide whether you like it or not?

I do like it (did I scare you there?) I adore Aunt Anna and will be watching our new DADA teacher for hints of a love affair with Snape. I can see that you wrote this prior to knowing Snape's backstory with Lily Potter. I realy felt for Snape in DH when it was all revealed. I applauded his actions once it was all known. I had a feeling he wasn't that bad for Dumbledore to trust him so much. I loved how Rowling handled that. It will be interesting to see what twist you put on this story with Anna & Snape. Will he be a good guy or a bad guy? Hmmmm.

I will also be watching for Neville's improved confidences.

I'll see how much more reading I can get done today. If not then look for more comments on Monday.

Have a great weekend!!

Author's Response:

Well, here we must agree to disagee . . . I think JKR had Albus manipulate and use Severus' feeling of love and guilt about Lily for 'THE GREATER GOOD".  He WAS a MASTER manipulator.  But ( and this is how JKR sees him, not we fans ) Snape was really a nasty, ugly, slime ball and if it hadn't been for Lily Evans, he'd have been standing shoulder to shoulder with Lucius and Bella, on Voldemort's side the whole way and Harry would never have stood a chance.  JKR says she didn't like him and can't understand the fans loving him, as he's unredemable in her eyes.  Go figure!

HOWEVER . . . this is MY story, MY AU and Severus is gonna be HAPPY! if it's the last thing I do . . . .oh, wait. . . .I already did!

HE!HE!HE! 

You'll see! But watch out for those cliffies!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 25/11/08 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 : Do I Make Myself Clear?

OK, maybe I should have rephrased that. I agree Dumbledore played each one of his chess pieces in order to achieve the end result which was the defeat of Voldemort. I can't say I agree with the manipulation but I do understand it. Even Churchill allowed Londoner's to die in order to maintain secrecy during WWII. At least that is what I remember learning in History class. The British had broken the German code but in order to maintain secrecy they didn't forewarn the citizens of certain impending attacks or else the German's would know the code was broken. (I need to look that up again for accuracy.)

Anyway, I liked the way she handled it and the way the characters accepted their role. Maybe not willingly at times but accepted it for the Greater Good. All nicely wrapped up to support Dumbledore's theory that Love was a powerful magic. But yet he manipulated that concept also. He used peoples love to obtain the end result. I wanted to let you know that I included this idea in Chapter 8 of my story. I thought your comment was too spot on not to write it somewhere. I hope I did it justice but you will have to wait until it's finished to comment whether I relayed it correctly. Remember, patience.

Author's Response: Patience . . . HE!HE!HE! . . . wait until you see who admonishes someone to 'learn patience' in this story.  I hate chess, by the way, but I agree with you about Albus and his dogged determination to do everything for the 'greater good'.



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 26/11/08 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4 : Why didn’t I see…?

Aawww. Snape's in love. I hope there will be some lemons coming up (I love that term BTW)

You caught me by surprise there. I knew she had feelings for him based on the Prologue, but I didn't know they were just acting a part.

It will be fun to hear the name calling between the two of them in future chapters for the sake of their cover in front of the students. I'm curious whether Albus is in on this or if he is an outsider. One comment you made in the chapter makes me wonder. I guess I'll find out soon enough. Onward!!!

Author's Response:

She was always his BEST and ONLY friend at Hogwarts, until 7th year when it got strained, to say the least, the Prologue giving you some clue.

BUT, Anna had NO idea he loved her, and she didn't realize what she felt for him had gone beyond friendship.  So this IS the beginning of their romantic relationship.

I wanted to get it started in the first couple of chapters as I knew I'd have much more fun with their efforts to hide it and trying to steal moments together.  You'll see their little 'secret' phrases that they use to say "I love you" at various parts of the story.

When Anna gets to breakfast, you'll see that Albus DOES know and was expecting ( hoping ) for just that to happen.  He HAD brought Anna to Hogwarts the previous week to confront Severus and vent her anger and get ALL of their collective 'baggage' out and done with, Then they concocted that little scene, for the kids sake, but Anna just thought it was to get back on an even keel with Severus as a friend.  She was clueless as to his real feelings.

That explaintion was nearly as long as the chapter!

I don't do REAL lemons ( explicit scenes ) but give you just enough to realize what's been happening or what's goning to be happening behind those close doors!

HE!HE!HE!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 26/11/08 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5 : Secrets

Hey!! You jumped past all the lemons. Now I'll have to use my vivid imagination. The discourse between Anna & Christopher is too funny. You can tell they really loved each other and he is comfortable with her moving on and finding happiness after his death.

Pulled an all-nighter- good one!! Now I'm off to imagine Snape pulling an all nighter himself. I'd much prefer Draco or Harry in that role but for the sake of your story I will picture Snape.

Author's Response: Ahem! By "all-nighter" I meant that Anna and Severus didn't get any sleep, if you know what I mean!  Made up for lost time, as it were! You'll like - I think it's chapter 33 "Do you wanna dance?". but don't read it now, work your way up to it! Ain't I a stinker?



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 26/11/08 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6 : Welcome to my world

Spectacular! I'm really getting into this and finding it hard to stop but I must or else I won't have a job!!

The intrigue is starting. I now know Dumbledore knows about their relationship. I liked how Snape greeted her-the tease.

I really like the diaglogue in this story. It sounds very realistic. I'll be back for more!

Author's Response:

I just HAD to let Neville get one over on old Draco!

HE!HE!HE!

So, the stage is set and school can begin!

ONWARD!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 26/11/08 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7 : Duck! Duck! Move!

I had to sneak one more in. My bad!! Great class. I was just thinking last night about some training classes which will be needed in my story. I kept thinking about "The Matrix" and how I could incorporate something like that into a training session without being too corny or unrealistic in the wizarding world. Now that's funny as we are writing stories about an unrealistic power and wondering how to make a story sound realistic. But that's the fun part of reading & writing fiction. Can you make your readers believe the unbelievable.

I really enjoyed her training session. It's one thing to cast and block spells but you must dodge them also. She really is a "cool" aunt, teacher and Auror. Very clever idea with the training box.

Author's Response: Throwing spells is one thing, avoiding spells is another and you have to be able to do the two things at once, so, as Anna pointed out, it becomes habit, instinct, what you do automatically.  And she's got LOTS of other 'tricks' up her sleeves.  Thanks for all of the R & R!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed
Date: 26/11/08 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 33 : 'Do You Wanna Dance?'

Do you think you could throw that out there and I wouldn't jump ahead and read it!! I only read the song seduction scene I swear!! That shameless hussy but I like her and it seems Snape had no complaints.

Ok- I'm going back to where I left off. I swear...well maybe after another read...or two.

Author's Response: I knew you wouldn't be able to resist . . . HE!HE!HE! But you'll understand that scene even more when you've read the whole story.



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/01/09 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15 : Afternoon Tea and Sympathy

I think you said you wrote this before reading HBP & DH. I will have to wrap my head around your AU because I keep wanting to say "no, Snape loved Lily" but this is your story not JK's. I like how you explained away Anna not being present in Snape's memory which Harry saw in the Penseive. Will Anna ever find out why Snape harbored such anger towards James? What is Anna's theory?

I'm glad Harry if finding out more about his parents. They are such a mystery in the series. You find a little bit about them here and there. Makes me wonder if JK will ever go back and fill in the gap. For now, I'll find answers in peoples fanfiction interpretations.

Author's Response:

Well, my 'theory' was about like JKR's about SS/LE, but with Anna, he viewed James as a cad, who treated his 'best friend from the crib' rather badly, just for being friends with him (SS).

Then, on the other hand, sometimes, two people just don't/can't give each other enough of a break, on personality differences, to ever have any kind of friendship.  AND they were teenaged boys, full of raging hormones and angst!  Read on, you'll see more clues.



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/12/08 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8 : Juggling schedules

I'm baaack!! I kept reading this chapter and never finished so I'm back and finally done!!

I just love the relationship between Anna and Christopher. Very playful and loving. Anna is also a very cool Aunt. Not much to say on this chapter. Scheduling training times, reminding members about the secrecy of some of their training techniques. I'm glad she is covering the techniques though. It's a nice insight into the training of an Auror. You can't just rely on your instincts to save you from a curse or hex. You have to practice, practice, practice! Off to read more.

Author's Response:

I just KNEW I heard someone shulking around . . welcome back.  It is always a bit of a press, finding those couple of minutes to read a bit more, so I'm glad you turned your back on everything else for some ME time, with my story!  HA!HA!

Actually, being the anal-retentive/compulsive that I am, I actuall sat and figured out a full schedule, for DA practice, rescheduling, N.E.W.D.T.s practice, etc before I could go on, as I HAD to know it WOULD work out, what with Quidditch practice and study hall ,etc. to consider. 

Yeah, Christopher is her balance, her steadying influence and she relies on him, even tho he's just a painting.  To her, it's like he's looking over her shoulder from wherever he is and giving her his words of wisdom ( and teasing, too ).



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/12/08 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9 : Hogsmeade Saturday

Oohhh I loved the inuendos flying between Snape & Anna. But you already know I skipped to Chapter 33. teehee.

I love the idea of soccer training. It just seems natural that Quidditch & soccer skills would be interweavable. I don't know why Harry didn't think about that in HBP. Funny how Ron didn't understand the half court rules. Wizards have such a hard time absorbing the simplest Muggle things.

I wonder, are you a closet Motorcycle Mama? Will she get Snape on that hog? I know, read on.

I do enjoy your dialogue. It's seems so natural, as though I'm listening to someone's conversation.

Author's Response:

Well, YOU try carrying on a love affair in front of 400+ people, when THEY all think you can barely stand to sit next to each other and see how easy it is ( isn't )!  Therefore, they devised the 'code' words and then Anna adds her brand of silliness.  Everyone knows she loves to get Snape's goat, so if she can do something silly enough to get a reaction from him, that's 1 for Anna!

My son and grandson are BIG soccer ( Manchester United ) fans and so I know a bit about the skills needed, especially the goalie.  Anyway, neede a reason for them to be out by the courtyard for the scene with Draco.

Yes, I'm a closet MM, but a bit long in the tooth to start riding now. I take that back, I'll ride, just not drive. HA!HA!

I want you to believe you're watching all of this from the safety of an 'Invisibility Cloak' . . . . so SHHH! and enjoy! HE!HE!HE!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/12/08 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10 : Draco’s Detention

"Draco, one day you'll understand" filing that away in case I need it for the future.

Ha- what a fun chapter. Of course those sniveling little snakes will go for paybacks. I wonder what Snape has in mind?

Not much of a detention though. Was that some underhanded reverse psychology on her part to get him into the DA?

Ok- I'm reading, I'm reading!!

Author's Response: Not reverse psych to get him into the DA, but to let him know that what she says IS the truth and he can always count on her to be totally honest with him.  She's NOT a Slytherin, with alterior motives behind ever move, just honest straight forward truth.  He WILL come to the right conclusion in the future . . . you'll see.  But it'll take a really life altering incident to get him to see the light.  Thanks for the review . . . enjoy the revenge . . HE!HE!HE!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 31/12/08 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11 : Paybacks are…fun!

HAHAHAHA!!! Very good payback. Nothing too nasty. Seems as though Anna made the split desicion to allow the prank to continue in order to get the payback over with. Had she pushed herself out of the way in time it would have just continued Draco's desire to get her back and possibly with even more ferocity. I guess Snape was in on the idea. I loved Anna "inadvertantly spraying" a bit of the pumpkin slime onto Snape and him flicking it off. I'm picturing this as a bit of comedic relief in my mind when I read it. I was truly waiting for Hermione to land another punch to Draco in the face. Maybe later?

I'll read on to see how she handles this.

Author's Response:

Yes, Severus was in on 'it' but was ready to rein in her temper if she lost it.  She's NOT reacting as he expected, but then, on the other hand, knowing her silly side, she is.

Hermione got her one shot already, but it'll all work out.



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 31/12/08 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12 : Just…do…this…!

hahahaha I can so relate to that first part where she reaches in and finds a few pumpkin remains down her cleavage. I hate when that happens!!

FOOD FIGHT!! I just rolled when Snape tried to get her with the pie and she turned tables on him and smashed it in his face and told him he needed to understand the rules better. And Dumbledores reaction to getting hit with the first pie. I can see him bending to the silliness. Too funny.

I just don't know how the Slytherins can get through life being so slow witted at times. 4 months to come up with a dueling club when the DA has been at it since the start of term. Tut tut (no,not you Tut the motorcycle)

I have a question which has been bothering me. You keep using "Ditto". At times it seems appropriate and at other times it doesn't seem to fit. I'm presuming it's some kind of secret code for "I love you" Let me know.

What else do you have up your sleeves? I'm curious, have you ever had a food fight with your kids/grandkids?

Author's Response:

Glad you liked the food fight.

Ditto is from "Ghost".  

Slytherin house, as Severus pointed out, is a case study in "short attention span theater".  But, as you'll see later in the story, Anna's not above lifting/borrowing the Slytherin's idea for the D.A. to use - all's fair in love and war. Wait and see!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 31/12/08 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13 : Slytherin Dueling Society

Appears as though the Slytherins are getting a shot at a bit of DA practice unbeknownst to them. This is also giving the students a chance to get to know Anna better. Maybe a bit of respect thrown her way at her skills. She healed a Millicent which will chalk one up for her with Millicent. She also threw a bone to Malfoy by complimenting him on his stance etc. How long will it take for them to join the DA I wonder. I see the next chapter pairs off Anna & Snape. Looking forward to it.

Author's Response: No, there will be no sign-ups for the DA.  If anything, this 'look' at Anna really drives home the fact that maybe she IS a force to be reconded with. . . . you'll see.



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 31/12/08 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14 : Severus vs. Anna

Ooohhh- was it Malfoy who she cornered in 1981 and landed her in St Mungo's? Now that I know what you mean by Ditto I see why she is throwing it about at certain times. I'm surprized the students haven't inquired about it's use. Those dirtly cheating litte Slytherin's giving Snape clues. He's a big boy and can handle himself. Well, maybe not with Anna ;)

Author's Response:

A - yes, Lucius was there, AND you'll learn all about it in the next 3 chapters, so read on!

B - they say 'ditto' and 'yes' too softly, and in Severus' case, through clenched teeth, for any of the students to hear or wonder what's up. 

C - Severus will refer back to this in the 2nd half of chapter 33, but wait for it, and it'll be funnier. . . . you'll see!

Ain't I a stinker?! HE!HE!HE!

 

p.s.

to answer your ? from 2 reviews ago: no, I've never had a food fight with the grandkids, as I don't have a house-elf and would have to clean the mess up myself . . . no, thank you.



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 16/01/09 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16 : Best Kept Secrets

Lots of interesting stuff in this one.  Anna is revealing a bit of her past to Harry, letting him know how close she was to Snape. I can't remember, did she ever reveal to any of the students previously that they were good friend?

Of course he wouldn't kill her. I'm surprised that she thought he would have.  Good boy for protecting her.

I have a hard time picturing Lucius in the fight but then again he was involved in the fiasco in the Dept of Mysteries in OotP so I guess he would be. 

So who killed Snape's mother?  Hmmm...next chapter!!



Author's Response:

Well, they ( the 6 kids who were there the first night ) knew that Anna and Severus had been classmates, but not how close.  She thought he just might kill her as he'd been with Voldemort for 3 or 4 years and she hadn't had any contact with him and didn't know just how much he'd been influenced by old Baldie Voldie. . . so, if he killed her, so be it, at least she thought he might take a bit of pity on her and make it quick.

He wasn't fighting, just the outlook and stopping any one ( Anna's Dad) from interferring.



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 16/01/09 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17 : Now I’m beginning to understand

I'm blushing, it's so cute the exchange between those two.  Too bad Snape died in DH and never had a chance to find love again.  (Big sigh)

So Voldy was the one behind Snape's parents death and imprisonment.  Rotten git.  A master as using his pawns. Now Snape came to the good side.

So she told Harry her little secret then removed the memory.  I wonder if there is a way to magically recover any of those forgotten memories.  That would be dangerous.  Oh well, off for more!!



Author's Response:

Yes, in MY story memory charms can be lifted when it's safe for the peoron to remember.

 



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Date: 16/01/09 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18 : Needed: One House-Elf

Snicker-doodles!!  I love those!!   My mom used to make them.  I'm going to have to raid her recipe box and make those with my boys someday. They like to eat... I mean make cookies with me.

I'm so glad Winky is finding a good Mistress and a good home. For a second there I thought Harry was going to be her house elf following Christopher's comments. 

Now Harry has a great Christmas present coming soon isn't he.  I'm going to have to get some tissues handy for that chapter.  I have a feeling I might cry, or laugh hysterically knowing Anna;)  But hey, what about Snapes Christmas present.  He's going to be disappointed if Santa doesn't leave Anna in his king sized stocking ;) hehe



Author's Response:

Don't worry about Severus ( remember chapter 33?) THAT'S when he gets his, and I'm not just talking Christmas presents, here! HE!HE!HE!

Harry's Christmas and the following holiday happenings are mostly funny but then Baldie Voldie sticks non-existant konk into the picture and the stuff hits the fan . . . then it's Anna vs Baldie Voldie until the end of the next story!

Read on, my darling, read on!

Thanks for the faithful reading and reviewing!



Reviewer: gnilworkj Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 16/01/09 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19 : To London…To London

I forgot to mention on earlier review how I liked the slingshot idea.  I've got two boys in Scouts and they are constantly using sling shots & air soft guns.  When I go to camp with them I'm always one upping the kids and parents with my shooting skills.  9 out of 10 in the bullseye with the BB guns.  I would make such a good wizard!! Ok- enough about me. Onto your review.

"patience, dear" "Anticipation, darling" I love those lines along with "Oh goody"  Funny to hear those words come out of Snape's mouth. He is the flirt isn't he?  My kinda guy.  They must be talking awfully low for the other teachers not to hear them. 

Some of your italics didn't take at the end of the story on the platform.  Didn't know if you wanted to fix that.

Motor-bicycle,  SNORT!!

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for catching those [i] marks . . . I fixed them

Yes, they talk VERY quietly, but with the noise level in the Great Hall at meal time, it isn't all that hard to not be heard, as they lean toward each other and talk in little more than whispers.

Arthur Weasley is one of my favorite characters and his love of all things Muggle is just too good to ignore! HE!HE!HE!

Thanks for the R&R!