Sirius remembers his lost friends, the loss of Lily harder to live with than it should. He never meant to fall in love with her and he wonders if things would have been different had he told her the truth on her Wedding day. This story is set during OotP, about a week after Sirius see's Harry off at Kings Cross Station.
*runs into review box and hides in corner, ashamed* Need I grovel at your feet for you to forgive me for not getting here for a month? *grovels at your feet* I'm sorry! I'm a chronic procrastinator! *cries* But okay, now I'm getting a bit carried away. Why, I ask, didn't I read this gorgeous one-shot sooner? You're constantly saying you write a lot of Dramione. And while this is true, your Sirius/Lily fics are astounding. Especially this one. This isn't just passion, as it was in Menace. This is pain and - for lack of a better word - drangstance. This is the epitome of drangstance.
From the beginning it's melancholic but then once we get into the flashback and describe how Lily never noticed him in that way until she and James were together... heartwrenching. And then the wedding, or the moment just before. I said earlier that I don't mind a good cry; this didn't make me cry, per se, but it made me very sad and pulled on my heartstrings. It was gorgeous.
Especially their conversation. Lily's stance on her feelings is intriguing, as is Sirius': they both know that she loves James as well, and he loves her back... but as you said, Lily never craved for him as she did for Sirius. It is absolutely heartwrenching, especially the kiss. *swoon* I remember now why I used to be the hugest Sirius fangirl, but this fic just makes me go "AWWW" and "OMFG" at the same time! The most powerful was the Liar line they both whisper to each other. They know they still love each other and yet they outright lie. And what made my heartache even more - "She waited and heard James walk away, knowing that he’d never doubt her word." That he's still so devoted to her, and Lily's betraying him as she is, as is Sirius... I mean, really. What's not to love or sob over? Gorgeous job, Elena. You are officially my Sirius/Lily idol. *hearts* Gorgeous, delightful, heartwrenching drangstance at its best!!!
Fabulous banner by Violet at SAYS! Dark times were ahead of them, a war was fast approaching, but for one young couple, they knew how to find a way to survive it and find love.
Eeek! My first review on Gluttony and it's for the wonderfully talented founder! I don't have to tell you how honored I am that I helped inspire this, but I really do have to! Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous! Eeeek! I really can't believe our little convo could inspire this! *lovesloveslovesloves*
Gorgeous characterization, heartbreakingly amazing emotions, spot-on dialogue, plot worthy of tears, and a climax of revolutionary proportions! LILY proposing to JAMES! Unheard of... but it feels so right. I'm in love. LOVE! Did I mention your James is SO attractive and so devoted to Lily, it makes my heart ache and it makes me smile so much. You're amazing. Elena, someday I'll review your stories and be actually coherent, but today is NOT that day! LMAO I am completely totally in LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE with this! *SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE*
10/10 and a massive huggleglompsquishtackle for you! *huggleglompsquishtackles Elena*
I think at this rate, you will beat me at any Best Fan Girl Reviewer!!
Thank you so much, but yes, you helped to inspire this entire thing. Besides the part that I wrote in the cbox, the rest was planned around that part :)I loved writing this, it did bring me to a few tears, but overall, I'm happy with it *hugs* Thank you for helping to inspre me to write.
Firstly, as the issuer of this challenge, I am ECSTATIC there will be a sequel! A fic like this DESERVES one! And, also as the issuer of this challenge - totally unexpected. Completely. I mean, yeah, I gave you Ronstoria and Daphile and Teddrose and all that... but good God. Scorpio and Neville/Ginny/Seamus... and the way it all played out... it was HILARIOUS. You, Marissa, are my IDOL. Dysfunctional family is an understatement. I am amazed and in awe and... *dies* Amazing, amazing job, and I'm so glad I gave you this. You totally completely without a doubt fulfilled it. *loves* You genius, you.
*blink* No, I did not see that coming. I completely did not expect this, not at all, juls. Amazing, amazing, AMAZING.
When I challenged you to write a Lily/James/OC songfic to Eleanor Rigby, I did NOT expect this. It's a bitter, angsty song, but you fit in just a little fluff. And that really made the story, the little flashbacks. They were perfect, and it hinted at the ending so subtly I didn't pick up on it until now! Lily and Lina were gorgeously characterized, I must say. We don't get to know either of them all that well, but it wasn't necessary at all because the emotions were there and... wow. Amazing stuff, really and truly.
It didn't matter that there wasn't that much James at all. Contrary to what I expected, the story wasn't about James and Lina, but Lily and Lina, and that just made it all the more wonderful. I certainly wouldn't have thought of it, so kudos to you! Subtly brilliant, tear-jerking, and excellent subtle incorporation of the song!!! Absolutely gorgeous job. OF COURSE you fulfilled the challenge! James/Lily/OC songfic to Eleanor Rigby, that was all there. But you took it to a new level, and I am SO ECSTATIC that you did! *cheers* A ten and favorites for you!!!!!!
May I remind you that you've never asked, nor have you even read about my awesometastic house-elf! :P (If you have, I'm sorry. If not, go to andy's HPFF page IMMEDIATELY!) But I digress. I just read Taryn's Fadogan - you know, the one I was expecting - and comparing it with this, I think I'm glad that both versions of the Fadogan ship are out there. Taryn's was more contemplative and reflective and more Trio-oriented than anything, but this is lighthearted fluff focused solely on the portraits. It's wonderful to see this of a ship no one else has heard of before! :P
But again, I digress. Your characterization of this was extremely intuitive and made me grin ridiculously. Especially Walrus! Walrus/Violet is LOVE! We have to figure out a name for that one. Wiolet? :P For serious, it's the little quirks you've put in that made this first chapter. That, and the time period. How perfect, set during PoA when she and Cadogan had a major-ish role! I LOVED the Sirius-ness, by the way. No pun intended. :P
Okay, I'm partially insane... but we all know that! Lovely, charismatic job and I'm waiting eagerly for more! I still find it hilarious you've actually stolen someone else's challenge... but tbh, who cares anymore? As long as you get the Weasley thing done. ;) But adorable! *glomps*
Author's Response: I do know of your house elf Gubs, but I haven\'t actually read about them. I\'ll go do that straight away! The only thing that\'s stopping me from going and crying in a corner about how bad my Fadogan is compared to Taryn\'s is the fact that she could be my mother. I\'m sticking by that. It was absolutely amazing! Although the Fat Lady and Sir Cad being on such... good terms is worrying me slightly. They must hate eachother for ever and ever! *evil grin*As for the name of Violet/Walrus, we have dicussed this at SAYS: it\'s Virus all the way. What a stroke of genius! :PI don\'t think I\'ve actually ever written fluff before... am I doing a decent job you think? With the time period, I thought that was how you came up with the ship in the first place, and therefore that was the obvious place to put it! No? Ah well!The characterisation just kinda... came to me. I got Walrus off the lexicon, and the only information I had was that he lived next to Vi and that he had a walrus moustache, so I had to build on that somehow! I\'m working on the next chapter now! Twitters xx
Holy God. Emma, PLEASE forgive me for not seeing this sooner! Honestly, you have to TELL me when you update! *cries* I feel so guilty now! I issued this challenge (not to you, but STILL!) and yet I took, like, WEEKS to get here! *sobs* Forgive me? Please?!
*cough* Now that you have... um.
VIRUS! Holy freaking Merlin, how much do I love Virus? ZOMG it is LOVE. It really, really is. I never would have thought I'd love Virus (as in, the actual non-living thing that infects people) but I do now! I was squeeing incessantly at the 'we' bit. The Fat Lady's reaction was priceless, too! Too bad there was no Walrus himself :( Promise me we'll see him again? Please? *cheers*
Did I mentioni I love Mrs. Norris too? Call me crazy (I bet you do :P) but she's just so despicable but so lovable too! And that's certainly something, since I don't like animals. :P And Flich - well, let's just say I can actually see why Courtney's in lvoe with him ;) *is insane, but how is that a surprise?*
And FADOGAN ITSELF. How can I, who made up the ship (if not the name - thanks for that, btw), NOT loveitttt?! Well, I do. Tremendously. Cadogan is, like the kitty, despicable but adorable. He makes me laugh, as does the Fat Lady. And Virus.
Because siriusly (shush - couldn't resist!) - Virus is the highlight of this story. The ship name kicks butt and the characters themselves are LOVE! *loves*
Lovely, adorable, sometimes despicable job, Emma! *attackles*
Author's Response: I DID tell you it was in queue! That was wayy back before I went away, and begged you for the Rockhart prompt. (Have you noticed that most of my ship names mean something? Virus, Rockhart...) Don't worry Gubby, I forgive you. The fact that you let me take on this challenge (well, steal it, but whatever) means that I shall love you forever anyway.
Wait... did I just declare my love for you? Ignore that. :P
I ADORED your squeeish ramble about Virus. Well, I adored your squee-ish ramble about it all, but I think that the bit about Virus was the best. I swear that you'll see him again... at the wedding! *dies* Kidding, Kidding... there shall be no Virus wedding. Or Virus babies (however much Taryn is convinced that portraits can do that kind of thing). Nah, you'll see him soon, I promise. I enjoyed torturing FL far too much! That reaction was priceless! <--Just so that makes sense, I don't know half of what my characters do before they do it. It's a downside of being an RPer.
I'm glad you like Mrs. Norris... even if I don't get why. I got the impression that FL didn't like her much(or maybe it's just MY FL... you can't really tell).
*bows* You are very welcome for the ship name, my dear. Any time! Give me a ship, and I'll name it! I'm stuck on Colt Rennor/Eva Porter though, so if anyone could help me with that, it would greatly appreciated.
I'm so glad you love the story! And the ships, and all the characters... your praise is even better, coming from the maddest FF writer I know :P
Of course Virus is the highlight of the story! I've given up calling it 'the Fadogan' and just call it 'the Virus' instead, even if no one can tell what in Merlin's yellow undies Virus is until they read it.
Lovely, adorable and most certainly not despicable review, Gubby! *attackles back*
Delightful and tear-jerking (outside my own allergies :P). Absolutely stunning job, Taryn! *glomps* I mean, it was genius, actually. Who would've thought you kill Trevor of all people - or toads?! I was shocked. But yeah, excellent job. Like juls said, your characterizations were perfect. Neville, Luna, Ginny, even Carrow and McGonagall. And how can I forget my favorite portrait? *grins ecstatically* You wrote him splendidly. It made me grin ridiculously, seeing them together and the swish of the horse's tail in the beginning, I was like :o *squeeee* And then they were "occupied" and "I didn't know portraits could shag." PRICELESS, plus it's so very Ginny to say that. And then, on the more serious note... an excellent examination of Neville's character. This is an aptly named, smartly-written Fadogan murder mystery and... squee! I love it!!! *glomps* Definitely lived up to my expectations! *glomps again*
Author's Response: Yay!!!! Yours was the opinion I wanted above all. I\'m so glad you liked my Fadogan...because that is NOT an easy ship to write, LOL. I\'m still not sure I had enough of it in there. And it broke my heart to lose Trevor, but something had to send Neville over the edge. I\'m so glad I finally have this done, and I\'m so pleased that you liked it! *hugglesquishglomptackle*! :o)
Life is a wonderful thing. Until it shatters around you.
Earth shattering banner by the wonderful Blue Suede Shoes @ SAYS!
LYKZOMFG TARYN! *gapes* :O *blinks* *is in awe* This is the first time I'm reviewing you for awhile, right? *ashamed* I'm sorry, honey, but this is kinda fitting. I don't read OF online, like EVER. But it was you, so I did (started last night) and now that I'm finished... LYKZOMFG.
*trying to be coherent* Firstly - you know this already - but I love Steph. In fact, I love all the characterizations here. It's a one-shot but introducing all these people we don't know, you've done a great job making me feel like I've known them for a long time. So *squee* about that. Megan is a great protagonist; she's such a sweetheart and I love her for that. Everything you've written here is very realistic, and I love that. *hearts*
And then JOSH. I basically suspected he would be having an affair, but the way you did it was LYKZOMFG. *is SO eloquent* I wanted so badly to like him and love him like Megan does, but I was suspicious of him from the beginning (Jack, on the other hand... *hearts*). So I was shocked, but the basic idea wasn't one that I hadn't thought of before. Still - obviously I was LYKZOMFG. :o
So. Um. Yeah. Awesome, awesome job. Great suspense, great premise, great twist... great! *adds to favorites* *rates 10*
Author's Response: I can die happy, I have shocked Gubby...twice! And brought about a slew of webspeak ;o). I love Steph, too, we all need a friend like her. And I'm glad you thought I did a good job of introducing all the characters without it being too tedious. Josh is a good guy, really, he is. He's just living a lie, and thinks he's protecting her. It would have been better for him to be honest with her though. I tried to paint a picture of what all was going to be lost when her life was shattered. I hope that came across. Thank you for reading my story, Gub...that you don't normally read OF makes me doubly honored! *huggles*