Gluttony: Fanfiction :: Indulge Yourself!

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 07/06/2008 07:20 pm · Chapter: Madison's New Friend

LOL...quirky and fun. I liked how you started the story with the dream. I laughed outright when Sirius asked her if it was that time of the month...boys!

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 06/06/2008 05:13 am · Chapter: Chapter 1

Oooh...I really like the beginning of this. It's humorous and fast paced. And you've done a really good job with the British slang and terminology. I look forward to reading the next chapter.

Name: JLHufflepuff (Signed) · Date: 14/05/2008 07:29 pm · Chapter: Madison's New Friend

I'm glad to see you've updated! So Melody has some definite angst to overcome. She suddenly realizes her friend is cute, and her sister is now linked with her enemy's little sister.. That would be enough to drive me crazy. I am interested to see how they decide to teach Angela a lesson. I'm always kind of worried about Sirius stories, but so far, so good. :)

Name: Labby (Signed) · Date: 13/05/2008 09:31 pm · Chapter: Madison's New Friend

So I'm finally back to review! :) Another great chapter! I love that her sister's made friends with her enemies sister. That's got to be annoying. Haha.. I love the interactions of the characters - the conversations seem really natural and pretty amusing at that. I'm definitely interested in reading more! Great job so far!

Name: Elena (Signed) · Date: 24/04/2008 07:01 am · Chapter: Madison's New Friend

hehehehe...Errr was the A/N ended in your name or directed at me as I'm Marissa?

Author's Response:
Haha no it's my name as well. Nice to meet another Marissa!

Name: JLHufflepuff (Signed) · Date: 01/04/2008 10:12 pm · Chapter: Chapter 1

I love it that you made your character a Hufflepuff! Go Puffs! So far I'm enjoying the way Mel interacts with her siblings, and I like the way they are represented across all the houses. That'll make for some interesting interactions later on, that's for sure. The situation with her summer love sounds ... um ... awkward to say this least. I wonder what is in store for Mel. :)

Name: Labby (Signed) · Date: 29/03/2008 06:03 am · Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a great start! I really like the voice of Melody.. you've created a really good character so far! I also love that she's a Hufflepuff! Puff pride here. :) I think from the beginning you get an all around good mood of the story with the time thing. Sounds exactly like my friends and family. I think it was a good introduction, without being too much of an introduction.. the characters qualities weren't all just laid out. I see that all too often. I do like her family a lot and it will be interesting to get to know them. I hope we'll get to see more of Madison.. she seems like an awesome little sister. So I really do like this so far and I'll definitely be looking for more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing so quickly! I'm glad you like it. And thanks for noticing the lack of a typical intro...one of my pet peeves is when someone spends the first chapter discribing everyone's looks, personality, etc. I definetly appreciate the "show, don't tell" policy! And there will definetly be more Madison. I originally had her in Gryffindor, but I like her so much I changed it to Hufflepuff so we can see more of her. Anyway, again thank you! It's such a relief that someone likes it since this is my first fan fic!

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