Aw, jeez . . . so many possibilities went thru my head that I think I just lost a significant number of brains cells on that liitle bit of a conversation. OW!
I'm not even going to try to figure it out, as you said yourself in an intro - that was LONGER than the 'story', by the way! - that we could make of it what we chose.
Being that my mind tends to drift down the gutter, I'll just say that you have a very wicked sense of humor to have tempted us like that!
Think I'll go enjoy my fantasies about what was REALLY being said.
HE!HE!HE!
Naturally, your grammar is flawless and it flows very well. Everything complements everything else and it really does have a profession feel to it.
It also excels storywise. The idea was interesting; how you got all this from the word "leap" is beyond me.
The only drawback would be that it's in the Drabble section. I would love to see this idea more fleshed out, but I know that it is what it is and I'll take it for just that.
It does seem a little vague to me, but you did point out that it is up to the reader to interpret what is happening, and this truly put my mind at work. I read it at least three times over.
If this goes on much longer it won't belong in the Drabble section, so I'll just close by saying that I really enjoyed it!
Author's Response: You're a huge boost to my self-esteem, you know that? Really, though, thanks for everything you said. And you're anything but dull - I knew you'd understand it. Thank you so much for reviewing!
Blaire...this has the potential for being really good. I want a little more though. What is he encouraging her to leap at, what leap would she rather take...it's alluded to, but I want more! I know it's just a drabble, but these first 280+ words leave me curious and eager to find out what's going on. So give me more ;o)!
Author's Response: My point is kind of to leave the reader wondering, to be able to come up with different options for what could be happening - and you're curious, so I did what I was aiming for! For this drabble, I think I'm going to keep it as it is because it was really what I was aiming for - I hope you understand that? But you've suddenly got me thinking about a possibility of a longer fic to write - and that's entirely possible. It would explain what this one is talking about. But thanks, Taryn! I appreciate it a lot.
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