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Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 07/09/2008 06:49 pm · Chapter: Ginny Weasley: Growing Strong

I like the premise of this story very much. Choosing when Ginny decided to stop pining for Harry and become her own person, strong, independent, spunky. At least that's how *I* see her. The way she was at the end of the story, telling Stephen off is what I expect from Ginny. I found it hard to believe that she would have allowed any guy to treat her that way.

I loved the conversation with Molly though. When Molly told her the right man would want to be with her, would treat her well... Molly has it spot on.

Author's Response: I feel that Ginny is the strong girl too... I just wrote how I think she went from that shy little girl we saw in the first movie to the strong woman we see in the seventh book. The reason I did it that way is because love is one of the most powerful feelings a human being can have. And that powerful feeling can end up being the demise of some people. I wanted to show how Ginny came from that demise and that made her the strong person she is today! I'm glad you liked the conversation with Molly... I enjoyed writing that. Thank you for your review!!

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:49 am · Chapter: Andromeda Tonks: Story Time

I think you got Teddy just right. I have a child his age, and you kept it totally age appropriate and believable. I loved the story of Ted and Andromeda. I could feel her grief and exhaustion in this story. She has dealt with a lot in her life. You depict her very well.

Author's Response: I'm glad Teddy seems to be right for his age.. Ginny certainly helped me with that. Some of my reactions were pretty bad, until she came along and questioned them. I'm so glad you liked this story! Thanks so much!

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:48 am · Chapter: Bellatrix Lestrange: Meeting

Bella's life was one of ease and luxury, having everything she wanted and everyone she wanted totally in her power. Part of Voldemort's draw was his inconceivable indifference to her beauty. The other was the offer of more power to add to her arsenal. How could she resist? Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you...yes, she really couldn't resist. She was bored out of her head by her easy life with no challenge, and Voldemort was a huge challenge...

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:46 am · Chapter: Angelina Johnson: Getting Out of Bed

Oh, the letter! This was incredibly sad, but the end gave some hope that she would move on. I loved Fred's joke about wanting to charm McGonagall. That was hilarious, and very Freddy of him. I loved this one.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I felt it was important to leave the reader with a sense of hope, otherwise the story would have been completely depressing. The letter allowed me to do that, because it was the final push she needed to decide to live again. I'm glad you felt I characterized Fred properly. I was a little worried that readers may think that he was too sweet to her, but I always felt he was different when around her. Thanks again for the review. This story was truly enjoyable to write.

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:44 am · Chapter: Hannah Abbott Longbottom: Heirloom

The scene in Dumbledore's office where she learns of her mother's death still takes my breath away. Anyone that has had that kind of news dropped on them knows the feelings Hannah experienced, and you captured them perfectly. You chose such sweet moments and paired them with such tragedy. This is so beautifully done.

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:42 am · Chapter: Petunia Dursley: Something Lost

Like I said at HPFF, this doesn't make me like her any better, but I do understand her motives more. You can almost empathize with her deep need to be special and accepted, to be good enough to be noticed by someone. Lily overshadowed her for her entire life, and she was robbed of any chance of reconciliation with her parents. She carries such bitterness that it was bound to spill out somewhere, and Harry was the perfect target. Nope, still don't like her. But now, I get her.

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:40 am · Chapter: Remus Lupin: Choices

I know I already told you on HPFF how wonderful this is, but I just read it again and decided you needed to hear it again! The parts of Remus's childhood are so touching, and explain so much about his attitude and personal beliefs. He aches to be good, and good enough, to be accepted by the world around him. I love the hope you let him reach for in the end.

Author's Response:
Hi Shanon!
Oh, I'm happy to hear from you again. I'm so glad you liked the parts about Remus' childhood because I especially enjoyed writing them. The kindness of his character is a very impotrant trait of his and I think that the inner strength that keeps him that way makes him more human then anyone else. He doesn't give in to bitterness - and it takes a lot of courage not to while living a life he lives - because he still wishes to keep a part of his humanity. His self-consciousness might not allow him to see himself that way, but subconsciously he wants to be human in the eyes of the world. In the end, he chooses to fight for that privilege and it is the marking of a true Gryffindor in him.
Thank you so much for reviewing - again. You rock!!
*hugs you*

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:38 am · Chapter: Charity Burbage: The Letter

I dearly love your Charity, Ginny. She is just some obscure character that takes her 15 seconds of fame in DH, but you've put flesh on the bones and created a character that we feel for. It is even deeper knowing what lies ahead for her. Such talent! I loved this.

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:36 am · Chapter: Luna Lovegood: All Things Possible

Luna has always been, well, a little different. Giving this insight into her helps us to see that her difference is not a bad thing at all, but part of who she is and who her mother was. I think her odd behaviors help her cling to her mother's memory just a little bit better. This is really lovely.

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/09/2008 03:34 am · Chapter: Percy Weasley: Prodigal

As you know, I think this is the most brilliant story. You captured the inner workings of Percy's heart and mind, the motives behind the actions that had most of us wishing he'd been in Fred's place. Now, he seems more human. In fact, you made him more of a Weasley than he'd ever been in JK's writing. Well done.

Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 27/08/2008 08:03 pm · Chapter: Luna Lovegood: All Things Possible

Luna is one of my favorite characters in the whole HP series. Winky, too.

This was a really sweet , slightly off center look at Luna's family and her life before Hogwarts. And her mum's death.

Then there's the thestral. So, she's got a friend not many can see. Figures.

HE!HE!HE!

Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 27/08/2008 07:47 pm · Chapter: Percy Weasley: Prodigal

I am sitting here at work (lunch break) with tears in my eyes after reading this story about the "Prat of the Decade", Percy.

Even when I was reading the book, all I thought about when he showed up and started fighting with his family was "About bloody time, Percy!"

This is Excellent! Really gets into his head and shows that it was just stubborn pride and not a little guilt and remorse that held him back from getting together with his family.

I think I must have missed the bit about the parnips wehn I read DH ... must go and look that up and see who threw them.

HE!HE!HE!

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 27/08/2008 02:34 am · Chapter: Andromeda Tonks: Story Time

Jamie...this was amazing! Really, truly amazing. Perhaps Ginny helped you with the characterization of a young Teddy, but you had him spot on. And that paragraph where you describe how Ted proposed, and showed her the Andromeda galaxy... beautiful. I think this may be your best work to date.

Author's Response: Wow, I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to respond, but I really appreciate your kind words. I'm glad young Teddy seemed right.. I did have trouble with him acting his age, and it came out a lot better with Ginny's help. The proposal came out unexpected to me, but something that seemed essential once I made it to that part of the story. I'm glad you liked it.. it was nice being able to write about the stars and such. Thank you so much!

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 26/08/2008 09:43 pm · Chapter: Bellatrix Lestrange: Meeting

Chilling. This story really does a good job of showing how quickly Voldemort was able to attract Bellatrix. I always got the impression she completely revered him in the books... not just as a leader, but it was as if she were completely entranced by him, as a lover would be. You did an excellent job of showing her complete intoxication caused by him.

Author's Response: Thanks again for a review, it very kind of you to review on both sites...And thanks for the praise, of course. :)

Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 26/08/2008 03:49 am · Chapter: Angelina Johnson: Getting Out of Bed

This is absolutely heartbreaking. I didn't know what to expect, never having read Angelina, but this is such a wonderful depiction. Mourning is always hard to write, but you do it very well - and the transition into the beginnings of feeling better is smooth and realistic. Beautiful!

Blaire

Author's Response: Thank you very much for this kind review. I used a lot of my own experiences with grief to write this. It was the only way I felt I could make it realistic. During the time I began writing this I had just gotten out of a relationship so I could relate to a lot of what she felt about being alone and not wanting to get out bed. This story kind of followed my own grief process, so that it ended in finding hope again. I think that is the most important moment in her life, choosing to live again. Thank you again. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It was very enjoyable, and cathartic, to write.

Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 26/08/2008 03:01 am · Chapter: Hannah Abbott Longbottom: Heirloom

Taryn, this means everything. I can see you in it so much - I know you wrote every bit with your heart and soul, and the outcome is incredible. The flashbacks and the present blend together seamlessly, your characterization of Hannah is wonderful, and you see mother-daughter relationships with beautiful perspective. This might be the best of your work I've ever read.

Blaire

Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 26/08/2008 02:10 am · Chapter: Kendra Dumbledore: The Price We Pay

This is absolutely incredible. It's the first Kendra fic I've read and it's just - amazing. Your characterizations are solid and consistent, as is your style, and I love everything - the flashback when Kendra met Percival... just everything. It's gorgeous.

Blaire

Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 26/08/2008 01:51 am · Chapter: Petunia Dursley: Something Lost

You write Petunia amazingly! I love the way she's completely oblivious to herself - thinking she doesn't care at all about the television show, but listening to every word, and claiming to hate models but envying the hair - it's so fitting to her character. Vernon as well - and the way they each treat their son.

You've written the story so realistically - a lot of writers think that from day one, Petunia was jealous and hateful towards her sister. You told the story much more effectively and believably. It's wonderful :)

Author's Response:
Thank you so very much :) Petunia is a big hypocrite in canon, and I wanted to keep her as in character as possible by adding in those tidbits about the actress and the supermodel. I remember she pretended that she didn't care about their sordid affairs but read the tabloids very eagerly :P I don't think it would make sense for Petunia to hate Lily from day one - to me, it seemed like something much more gradual that came about as a result of jealousy. So glad you liked this and I appreciate the review!

- Girldetective85

Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 26/08/2008 01:11 am · Chapter: Remus Lupin: Choices

I love this, as I have the whole collab so far. It's so utterly realistic - even though I don't believe in werewolves, I kept feeling like the story was really happening. I'm a sucker for any well-done Remus story, and this is exceptionally good. Great job :)

Blaire

Author's Response:
H Blaire!
Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm very happy to hear you liked it and thought it was realistic. Even though werewolves aren't real, human emotions are I wanted to express the variety of Remus' thoughts and feelings. It makes me so happy to hear you thought it was good. Remus is my favorite character and it's a huge compliment to hear I've done him justice.
Again, thank you so much for the lovely review. I appreciate it immensely.
~ButterflyRogue

Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 26/08/2008 12:45 am · Chapter: Charity Burbage: The Letter

This is absolutely wonderful. The work you put into it was well worth it - the result is beautiful. I don't think everyone stops to think how serious being a Squib is for the Squibs themselves and for their families - it would rather be like having someone deaf or blind, wouldn't it? And yet it's almost treated as if it's their own fault. In the wizarding world, the divide between them and Muggles is so cemented...

You wrote this so well. I loved reading every line of it :D

Blaire

Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 25/08/2008 10:41 pm · Chapter: Luna Lovegood: All Things Possible

What a pretty story! This is a great way to capture what happened with Luna's mum - and you wrote Luna so well. I like the way she discovered the thestral and the changes Xeno saw in her after her mum's death - the little details can be so important in a story. Beautiful job!

Blaire

Name: Eyriana (Signed) · Date: 25/08/2008 10:33 pm · Chapter: Percy Weasley: Prodigal

This was absolutely gorgeous. I've never read a Percy fic before, but I think this is so well done - you keep it canon, and write the way his mind changed so well. I cried a little bit at the end, it was so sweet.

Your description is absolutely lovely. "...destroyed the very roots that would have steadied him through the storms, and now he was alone, without an anchor in a sea of evil." That line is so, so beautiful. A great job altogether!

Blaire

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 25/08/2008 12:41 am · Chapter: Angelina Johnson: Getting Out of Bed

I'm intrigued by the character of Angelina. I'm sure she would have been devastated by the loss of Fred, but, the line from George about not being able to imagine her pain... I think it would be more accurate the other way around. Of course she would be in pain, but I don't think anything could equal the pain of losing a twin.

Author's Response: You're right. That line was worded wrong. In the original draft of the story it was written differently and it made a lot more sense. Originally I referenced George and Alicia as being in a relationship. So the original line was about not understanding what it felt like to lose the love of your life. I cut everything referencing George and Alicia, as I found it irrelevant and unfortunately I didn't fix that line properly. In no way did I mean to lessen George's grief. I think they both would have experienced it differently, however. He lost a part of his past, a piece of himself, but she lost her future. I think it is something he would not be able to understand. For him his future still exists, though not happily necessarily, whereas in her mind her future does not exist at all. Regardless of this however, the line should not have been worded the way it was. George would definately be experiencing debilitating grief. I think however, he'd do a better job of hiding it, because I think he and Fred were always a little afraid to let their emotions show.

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 25/08/2008 12:38 am · Chapter: Kendra Dumbledore: The Price We Pay

This is such a heartbreaking insight into Kendra. I loved the detail you put into her background, and how Percival helped to teach her to love, and yet as is sometimes true, bad things happen to good people. I think it's helpful that Albus had so many years of living in a loving family, he had more than Aberforth, and I think that helped him to get past the pain. Of all the chapters that have been written so far, this has the saddest of endings, but you did a great job of making me truly feel for Kendra.

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 25/08/2008 12:35 am · Chapter: Petunia Dursley: Something Lost

This is yet another chapter that makes me proud to be associated with this story! I loved the way you went through Petunia's morning, and how she keeps contradicting herself, she listens to the gossip, but she doesn't really pay attention to it. She takes a hot bath, but doesn't really care that the celebrity does the same thing. I loved the flashbacks. You showed the depth of the relationship between Petunia and Lily. We only get a glimpse of it The Prince's Tale, and you managed to take it so much further in this chapter. And I kept waiting for her to open the door and find Harry and find out what her reaction would be. Great Job!

Author's Response:
Thanks so much! :) I knew as soon as the idea for a Defining Moments collaboration came up that I wanted to choose Petunia, and the moment that she decides to keep Harry. After all, if she had never made the choice (or been forced into it) Harry Potter's story would have turned out much differently! Since Petunia is desperate to differentiate herself from Lily by being as "normal" as possible, I wanted to depict a "normal" day in the life of Petunia Dursley. Because Lily disrupted Petunia's regular life, I thought it might be appropriate that Harry disrupt Petunia's regular day. I'm thrilled that you like this and thank you very much for the review!
- Jules

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