The intrigue is starting. I now know Dumbledore knows about their relationship. I liked how Snape greeted her-the tease.
I really like the diaglogue in this story. It sounds very realistic. I'll be back for more!
Author's Response:
I just HAD to let Neville get one over on old Draco!
HE!HE!HE!
So, the stage is set and school can begin!
ONWARD!
Pulled an all-nighter- good one!! Now I'm off to imagine Snape pulling an all nighter himself. I'd much prefer Draco or Harry in that role but for the sake of your story I will picture Snape.
Author's Response: Ahem! By "all-nighter" I meant that Anna and Severus didn't get any sleep, if you know what I mean! Made up for lost time, as it were! You'll like - I think it's chapter 33 "Do you wanna dance?". but don't read it now, work your way up to it! Ain't I a stinker?
You caught me by surprise there. I knew she had feelings for him based on the Prologue, but I didn't know they were just acting a part.
It will be fun to hear the name calling between the two of them in future chapters for the sake of their cover in front of the students. I'm curious whether Albus is in on this or if he is an outsider. One comment you made in the chapter makes me wonder. I guess I'll find out soon enough. Onward!!!
Author's Response:
She was always his BEST and ONLY friend at Hogwarts, until 7th year when it got strained, to say the least, the Prologue giving you some clue.
BUT, Anna had NO idea he loved her, and she didn't realize what she felt for him had gone beyond friendship. So this IS the beginning of their romantic relationship.
I wanted to get it started in the first couple of chapters as I knew I'd have much more fun with their efforts to hide it and trying to steal moments together. You'll see their little 'secret' phrases that they use to say "I love you" at various parts of the story.
When Anna gets to breakfast, you'll see that Albus DOES know and was expecting ( hoping ) for just that to happen. He HAD brought Anna to Hogwarts the previous week to confront Severus and vent her anger and get ALL of their collective 'baggage' out and done with, Then they concocted that little scene, for the kids sake, but Anna just thought it was to get back on an even keel with Severus as a friend. She was clueless as to his real feelings.
That explaintion was nearly as long as the chapter!
I don't do REAL lemons ( explicit scenes ) but give you just enough to realize what's been happening or what's goning to be happening behind those close doors!
HE!HE!HE!
Anyway, I liked the way she handled it and the way the characters accepted their role. Maybe not willingly at times but accepted it for the Greater Good. All nicely wrapped up to support Dumbledore's theory that Love was a powerful magic. But yet he manipulated that concept also. He used peoples love to obtain the end result. I wanted to let you know that I included this idea in Chapter 8 of my story. I thought your comment was too spot on not to write it somewhere. I hope I did it justice but you will have to wait until it's finished to comment whether I relayed it correctly. Remember, patience.
Author's Response: Patience . . . HE!HE!HE! . . . wait until you see who admonishes someone to 'learn patience' in this story. I hate chess, by the way, but I agree with you about Albus and his dogged determination to do everything for the 'greater good'.
I do like it (did I scare you there?) I adore Aunt Anna and will be watching our new DADA teacher for hints of a love affair with Snape. I can see that you wrote this prior to knowing Snape's backstory with Lily Potter. I realy felt for Snape in DH when it was all revealed. I applauded his actions once it was all known. I had a feeling he wasn't that bad for Dumbledore to trust him so much. I loved how Rowling handled that. It will be interesting to see what twist you put on this story with Anna & Snape. Will he be a good guy or a bad guy? Hmmmm.
I will also be watching for Neville's improved confidences.
I'll see how much more reading I can get done today. If not then look for more comments on Monday.
Have a great weekend!!
Author's Response:
Well, here we must agree to disagee . . . I think JKR had Albus manipulate and use Severus' feeling of love and guilt about Lily for 'THE GREATER GOOD". He WAS a MASTER manipulator. But ( and this is how JKR sees him, not we fans ) Snape was really a nasty, ugly, slime ball and if it hadn't been for Lily Evans, he'd have been standing shoulder to shoulder with Lucius and Bella, on Voldemort's side the whole way and Harry would never have stood a chance. JKR says she didn't like him and can't understand the fans loving him, as he's unredemable in her eyes. Go figure!
HOWEVER . . . this is MY story, MY AU and Severus is gonna be HAPPY! if it's the last thing I do . . . .oh, wait. . . .I already did!
HE!HE!HE!
You'll see! But watch out for those cliffies!
Once I knew the backstory of the prophecy I too thought Neville would have an important part in the end of Voldemort. I liked how Rowling gave Neville the improved confidence. It will be interesting to see how you give Neville that step up.
I'm still not far enough into the story yet. I like the explanation regarding Marietta's betrayal. I'm curious about Luna's relationship with Neville. I originally thought they would hook up but Rowling had other plans.
I'll keep reading.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I thought Luna and Neville would wind up together, too. And in this story they do, sort of . . . little spats, etc.
Well, Cho got the blame in the movie, which I thought stunk! But I couldn't let the kids be mad at Marietta, especially after they found out how underhanded old Delores had been when interrogating them, so that's the reasoning behind this scene. The first 6 chpaters cover the first 24 hours , then 2 for the first DADA class, then 2 for Hogsmeade weekend, then 2 for Halloween , 2 for November and the Slytherins, then the 'talk' Anna promises Harry (3 chapters ) then the holidays and the all hell breaks loose!
HAVE FUN!
HE!HE!HE!
I'm still reading and enjoying so far. There is alot of information to acquire so it will take some time to get into the flow and see where this is going.
Aunt Anna sounds like quite a character. It will be interesting to see what goes on with Snape. Hmmm. Obviously this is not a Marauder story at all but it was a set up to the future story to come. Hmmm.
I only have an issue with the flow of the sentence "The kids jumped up and watched the sofas..." It's probably a personal issue but I had a hard time with the flow. I'll keep reading and keep reviewing!!
Author's Response:
Well, let's consider this . . . where do you live? I'm in Maryland, USA and I write like I talk, so, that's the flow of my brain waves. . . . HE!HE!HE!
As you didn't stop to review until the end of chapter 2, it seems I have you hooked! Yippee! Have fun and watch out for my cliffies - I'm a real stinker with those puppies!
HE!HE!HE!
Is Anna Twig a Rowling character from Marauder period or is this one of your OC's? I think this is the first Marauder theme story I've ever read. I've been hooked on Dramione's. Some are just too juicy. My bad. So you are broadening my horizons.
Author's Response:
Anna is an OC. Let me give you my reasoning for this story. I kept thinking that despite the fact that Baldie Voldie "picked & marked Harry as his equal", that didn't make Neville an less of a wizard. Despite his being a bit of a dork, he's a very powerful, smart, quick minded guy who EVERYONE has and will underestimate - to their peril . . . as BV found out when Neville sliced off Nagini's head!
ANYWAY, I was thinking ( this was right after PoA ) . . . what if Neville had a Godmother . . . and what if she'd been at school with Harry's parents but wound up an Auror and worked with Neville's parents . . . and what if, for the 6th year, Albus recruits her to be the D.A.D.A. teacher . . . and believe me, it just snowballed from there. The strangest things happened when I was writing this story, too. (I'll PM you the list!) and I came up with the EPILOGUE in the middle of writing the first story!
ALthough it's not a true Marauder's story, it brings all of those people back together - at least the survivors . . . and then some . . . you'll see. SO, take your time, enjoy and welcome to MY world!
Blaire
Author's Response: Actually, it's Petunia that's put the fear of God in him. She' told him to behave himself and if it takes a drink or two, Harry was more than happy to help his uncle along. She reminded him of all of the clients and their awful wives she's had to entertain ove the years, so it's payback time. Plus Arthur cornering him and being SO interested in the factory, gave Vernon a perfect excuse to not have to talk to too many of 'them'.
Blaire
Author's Response: There are a couple of my 'cliffies' that really are nasty . . . . not just another take-a-breath-and-turn-the-page type. Also, I have a couple, in the second story, where I jump to a different scene at the beginning of the next chapter and THEN get back to the resolution of the cliffie . . . I is a bad, bad girl, I is . . HE!HE!HE!
Blaire
Author's Response: I TOLD you he'd start showing up, slowly getting things started against Harry and all of them. It's going to be an interesting NEW YEAR. HE!HE!HE!
Blaire
Author's Response: I have Gwen at about 32 or 33, but not much older than that. She was at university when Anna married her dad, so sh'e not that much younger than Anna. Christopher died at around 65, inoperable brain tumor. Ann could extend his life a bit, slow down the growth but not save him, so they made the most of his last year and he died happy and contented.
Blaire
Author's Response: Well, Peter hung out with them at school as he was in their class, dorm and year, but when they went home, they didn't necessarily include him, besides, by that time, Sirius was living at the Potters, so it was easy for them to all wind up at Remus' house. For all we know, he {Peter}spent his vacation with Baldie Voldie as a junior Death Eater! Who knows . . . I just didn't feel like having him hanging around. He creeps me out!
Blaire
Author's Response: That's my Christmas tree, by the way, 7 1/2 foot, 1,200 lights, half color, half white, and about 300 ornaments from EVERYwhere and a LOT of them are trains ( my hubby's a train nut!) HE!HE!HE!
Blaire
Author's Response:
Winky's just a little too literal for her own good, but she soon get's to know her 'Missy Anna'
And Harry's no fool, so why not just grab what came in second and then he and Remus are sure that the girls will like their gifts.
Blaire
Author's Response: Oh, you're right about Remus and Gwen ( when I wrote this, I had no idea JKR would have Tonks and REmus wind up together, so I have Tonks and Charlie having a long distance relationshop, that's hinted at but not explored. Just know Tonks isn't a wallflower, she has a social life, too. Sharlie will be home over the holidays.
Blaire
Author's Response: Bet you DON'T know who's at the door. Yeah, Winky's gotta cheer up a bit, don't you think? NOT! HE!HE!HE!
Blaire
Author's Response: I told you Tut would be back, and he shows up during the summer vacation, too AND the final battle! HE!HE!HE!
Blaire
Author's Response:
I love house-elves and once JKR used her in PoA, she more or less ignored her from then on. So, I decided to give WInky a second chance . . . isn't that what Hogwarts is famous for . . second chances?
Blaire
Author's Response: They tend to keep their conversations at the staff table to a minimum, as he's not supposed to be the 'chatty' type. But they can at least see each other and say a few whispered sentiments to each other without drawing attention to themselves.
Blaire
Author's Response: Well, she's famous for her temper and Lucius just got a taste of it, first hand. HE!HE!HE!
Blaire
Author's Response: She doesn't sugar coat it, but she doesn't gloify the marauders, either. "Boys will be boys"
Blaire
Author's Response: Stay tuned, you're about to find out!
Blaire
Author's Response: I really gets Draco's goat that she does that without mcuh effort . . he gives her things on a silver platter and she's no fool, she'll use every opportunity to show that she's NOThis enemy, if he'd only open his eyes.
Blaire
Author's Response: Oh, he cares very deeply for Anna, but they had the portrait done, knowing he was dying and that she'd go on with her life and probably fall in love again, as Christopher had when his first wife died. He's been there, done that, so he has more understanding of the feelings she's experiencing than most.
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