First things first, that sonnet... AMAZING! Truly lovely. Next, If her life were to be unraveled, I would not be the one to pull the thread, the imagery in that line was also amazing, it really stood out to me. Sometimes, Gub, I think you are entirely too smart for your own good (okay, more times than not ;o). I spent the first 3/4 of this story completely and utterly confused... which I'm pretty sure was your intention, so well done! And while keeping the reader is guessing can be fun at times, it might turn off others, so you might want to make things more obvious a tad sooner.
This line: “Are you scarred enough, girl?” Is that supposed to be scarred, or scared? I think either works, but scared seems more appropriate. Great job though!
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