Gluttony: Fanfiction :: Indulge Yourself!

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 04/09/2008 04:51 am · Chapter: Chapter 3

LOVE that she stunned a squirrel, lol! And I think it's hystercial that Al is calling her Mum, and worried that she's going to yell at him. Hex him to kingdom come is more like it, lol. She's going to think he's nuts or she is.

Now, who has Al seen die that he's able to see the thestral? I'm looking forward to the next installment!

Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 02/09/2008 07:04 pm · Chapter: Chapter 3

Aw, jeez, now Al's talking with his Mum and it's pre-battle and how did he get THERE? I thought he was with Sirius?

I better try and kep score on this one as I'm sinking fast.

Better yet, I'll just wait for the next chapter and let AL do all the talking,rather than ask a bunch of silly ?s!

HE!HE!HE!

Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 02/09/2008 06:54 pm · Chapter: Chapter 2

We just jumped about 1,000 years, didn't we?

So, it's Sirius ( I'm assuming the REAL Sirius - Marauder and all that)) and AL and ???, wait, if it's Al it must be Rose?

Okay, I'm officially comfused but intrigued, so I'll read on. I know better than to give up on these stories, they usually sort themselves out in a chapter or two.

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Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 02/09/2008 06:39 pm · Chapter: Back to the Future

Well, wiinning story or not, already, the beginning gets MY vote.

Old Salazar causing trouble, eh? Had his own "Pet' did he? Evil git.

And now the ? is, who was that in the woods and where did they get off to? Will Godric, indeed, keep the sword?

Only way to find out the answers to these and other ?s popping into my mind . . . READ THE NEXT CHAPTER!

HE!HE!HE!

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 31/08/2008 07:49 pm · Chapter: Chapter 2

Oh, yay! So, is it Rose or Lily with Al, back in time with Sirius? I can't wait to read and find out. I liked the description of Sirius in the Forest and how he was confident in most things, but Quidditch he had to work for. And I like the connection between Sirius' broken broom and Harry's that Sirius replaced for him. I see why this story won the competition!

Name: ginwannabe (Signed) · Date: 29/08/2008 02:30 am · Chapter: Back to the Future

Ooooh... this is a great beginning. I think this story truly deserved to win the competition. I'm intrigued with how the sword came to be in the forest. Kind of a "which came first, the chicken or the egg" scenario. How did the sword arrive to him (presumably from the future given this is a time travel story), if he didn't have it made? I'm eager to see where you all take this.

Name: notenoughpotter (Signed) · Date: 28/08/2008 05:58 pm · Chapter: Back to the Future

This is a unique beginning to your story. I'm assuming we won't stay in this era for long, though based on the story's summary.

Overall, I liked it - full of nice detail, interesting having the basilisk and the sword in this chapter. I'm just not sure about the section where Gryffindor is talking to himself.

You wrote:
“Just goes to show. Just goes to show, good doesn’t really ever triumph. Evil is just too strong”.

This just doesn't sound like the Gryffindor I always pictured in my head. Perhaps, though, he becomes more "brave and strong" after defeating Slytherin.

I'll be interested in following this story as you add to it.

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 28/08/2008 06:30 am · Chapter: Back to the Future

Beautifully written! I have always avoided Founder's Era due to the distinct lack of emotion and heavy amount of politics and cliche' people tend to write. This has an intriguing beginning, filled with fantastic description of Godric's fear of failure, exhaustion, and desperation. What a stroke of inspiration to create the beginnings of the famous sword. Super job.

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