Gluttony: Fanfiction :: Indulge Yourself!

Name: Twinsmom (Signed) · Date: 26/09/2008 11:33 pm · Chapter: Checkmate

This was really good. All awkward and nervous. Just like a first date should be. Nice ending, too.

Name: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: 19/09/2008 06:36 pm · Chapter: Checkmate

Neville's daughter. Cool. Hadn't thought of that.
Why does every generation make the same dumb mistakes when they start dating?
I know why - they don't listen to the voices of experience that try to impart 'words' of wisdom' and/or listen to their doofus friends who don't h ave a clue.
Typical
And funny, because of it.
Well, it worked out, so that's alright.

Name: juls (Signed) · Date: 12/09/2008 09:11 pm · Chapter: Checkmate

Merlin -- you are amazing!!!

I loved this oh so very much. It's lighthearted and delightful, and you wove it all together quite nicely.

I love how you wrote Hugo. He wasn't perfect and he wasn't too Ronish. Just enough to know he is Ron's son. He holds his mother's competitive streak - if only he could find the perfect chess mate to play with.

I aboslutely loved Hope -- if she's a Mary Sue, I couldn't see it. She's sweet, adorable. Just the right the partner for your Hugo.

Did I mention yet I love the two of them? Oh, maybe not. But -- I DO!!

This was very well written. I'm hoping somewhere in the (near) future you bring them back in another story.

Huggles,
~~juls

Name: Georgia Weasley (Signed) · Date: 03/09/2008 03:35 am · Chapter: Checkmate

Ah! This was great. Hugo is such a wonderful mixture of Hermione and Ron. He's got the over-analytical part of his mother, where he thinks things through a dozen different ways and stays mostly to himself, except a few close friends. Then he's got the awkward, teenage boy thing from his dad, complete with foot-in-mouth disease. His dad always knew the exact wrong thing to say to a girl, too. This was long, but worth every word. You have a way of creating the picture in your readers' minds. Great chapter.

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