Excellent confrontation with Harry and Draco.
The explanation of feeding the baby was good, too.
Cashing in those debts was just masterful. Draco knows he's stuck, but he just can't admit it!
Well done.
Author's Response: Thanks for the read & review BKL. And thanks for the help. I couldn't have worked some of it out properly without your assistance. Look for those paybacks in the next chapter ;)
Well, the conversation with Draco went about as well as expected, don't you think? Which wasn't much, come to that. I'm glad Draco held his tongue, though. Harry really knows his stuff, doesn't he?
Oh, by the way: "and to dig in his heals against protests" I'm think you meant heels!?!?
Ginny knows that whatever Harry has planned, Hermione's safety is paramount, so it follows that Harry can't tell her everything.
Now, what does Hermione want?
ONWARD!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading Holly. I will make that correction.
Draco might have held his tongue, but BKL8008 loaned me some nice passive aggressive behavior which you will see in the next chapter which is titled, "Paybacks" It will have a double meaning. I just need to write the darned thing!! Harry has certainly matured as Wizard and learned many skills. He and Draco will be teach each other a few things.
Ginny definately isn't acting as Harry expected and you are correct, she's been with him long enough to know that what he has planned is for everyone's safety. Man, this writing stuff is really hard!! I don't know how you people do it!!
Author's Response: I didn't want to kill him off but in order for this to flow towards a Dramione, it had to happen. Ron would NEVER cheat on Hermione!! I had another version of this story in mind where Ron doesn't die, it won't be a Dramione but Draco does redeem himself and help the Trio out. If I can ever finish this one I might rewrite it with that version. Who knows.
i am guessing that you have had a child or more and that is why you were so great at describing not only hospital scenes but the emotions of each of the characters from Draco to having a baby and Hermione to finding out about one.
That I think was your best writing. You still have everyone being really sweet and I woudln't mind a little conflict thrown in there. I also felt that Hermione and Harry were flirting a bit, I know that that was not your intention, but it didn't read like they were friends so much as possible lovers... I don't know, maybe because Hermione giggled and beamed (though the beaming I kinda get).
Author's Response:
You might have skipped a chapter. They are the Malfoys. If you get a chance, go back and read the one you missed. I think you missed "The Blessing" There are some important details there regarding Draco's emotions following "Love and Loss"
Hermione is glad to see her friend as she hasn't seen him in some time. More on that in later chapters. She's beaming from the pregnancy of course and excited for the party so she and Ron can announce their news. I tried to write their banter more as teasing between two friends. I always enjoy when a male friend comments on my appearance and may blush or inquire what they want in return. They always seem to have an alterior motive when commenting on your dress. "Boy you look good tonight! By the way, can I ask you to dog sit for me?"
You seem to like the people to get engaged on the spur of the moment... no actual dating or planning an engagement (not that there is anything wrong with that, just an observation).
My only concern is that everyone seems to be really nice and sweet and I cannot see any dimension to their characters... there were a couple of moments when you displayed Draco comparing himself to Granger, but they were tiny glimpses. I think that you should really work on developing the charcaters more.
Author's Response:
I will work on that. I thought about your earlier comments and gave some serious thought to re-writing some parts now that I've been able to get some of the idea out on paper and take another look at it.
As far as rushed in regards to them marrying on the spur of the moment, you have to remember that some time has gone by. It's not as though they just met and then graduated and he asked her to marry him. I used the term "years passed" so they have gone to school together for a couple of years and were good friends. Best friends as far as Malfoy was concerned. He even knew he loved her but felt it couldn't go any further due to his past. She was also in love with him but they both chose not to approach the subject for their own reasons. His because of his past and hers because she felt that there was something he needed to deal with on his own before he could accept a relationship. This is also a flashback so I didn't want to dwell too much on their love story. I plan on referring back to their relationship in later chapters.
The honeymoons were sweet if a little unrealistic (but it is a romance I guess). It's just that you put so much detail into the scenery and skip out on the best parts which are the emotions... like how nervous they all might be (it is their first time).
I am also not sure if you have ever tried it in a bathtub, but it is not as easy or as romantic as it sounds...especially if it is the first time... I hope that didn't sound harsh, I just think that you are so great at describing things (like the room and the dresses) but you seem to skim over all the gritty stuff.
Author's Response:
I like to think that Dudley and Harry parted in DH with a certain understanding of each other. I hoped that Dudley's time with Hestia and Dedalus educated him on Harry's past and current situation. I tried to relay that in their conversation together at the wedding. They might not be best of friends but especially at such a joyous occassion as a wedding, it's time to bury some hatchets and look to the future with a positive attitude.
I think you are right regarding the honeymoons. I tried to relay the boys nervousness in the scene with Dumbledore but I think it requires some more nervousness during the honeymoon. My first version of the honeymoon went through a re-write in order to 'tone it down' and initially Ron's & Hermione's first 'encounter' was just outside the tub. I guess during the re-write some critical details were overlooked on my part. Since this is, uh-hum, my first time writing, I was just excited to get the darned thing written and posted. As for the reference to the tub- from what I remember, it isn't all that great which is why I initially had them elsewhere (she says blushing) I'll work on that bit. I'll let you know when I change it.
Thanks again for reading and leaving a review.
Sorry I don't have much else to say about this one. :)
Author's Response: Others have commented on the rushed feeling but I thought it added to the idea of rushed wedding plans. Imagine planning a wedding in one week. Frazzled to say the least. Hope you enjoy the upcoming wedding. Draco will come back into the picture in Chapter 5 and then this will all get going as the stories merge. I really wanted to review some back story with the Trio and wanted to write the wedding. They will not cheat, it's not in their character. Read on and thanks for reviewing.
Author's Response: I love Ron (after Harry of course) and the whole Ron/Hermione relationship. I waited for 7 books for those two to hook up and I was nearly ready to rip the book if JK didn't get those two together by the end of DH. I loved writing that bit with Molly and the boys. I thought it would be funny to keep George in his place though. She has to be able to keep her thumb on one!! I will try to re-work this later on with something for Fred. But I also didn't think it would be part of Fred's personality to want people to grieve overly much for him. Sort of like the Irish side of my family...when I die, throw a party!! I just received word that my uncle died this morning. I know there will be a party! Thanks for coming back and hope you enjoy the rest.
Otherwise this is a very interesting start to a story that intrigues me. I love the title and banner as well by the way. :)
Author's Response: I love my banner. I thought she did a great job with the 'feeling' I wanted it to show. I've had others comment on the POV issue but I thought the re-write of that part handled it. I tried to add things like 'his mother told him' etc to make it seem more of Draco's thoughts instead of Narcissa's. I understand what you are saying about rehashing items but it might make more sense to you when you get to chapter 4 which is "Love & Loss" This chapter, as well as Chapter 4, are meant to be flashbacks. I did have 'Flashback' posted in context of chapter but reviews suggested I remove it. I will take another look at the chapter (and Chapter Summary) to see if there is any way I can revamp it a bit. I don't want to remove the memories of the past as I think they are important. I might just have to work on putting it more into Draco's perspective. Thanks for the review and for the comments on the details. I wanted to mirror JK's clever use of names and their meanings. Even to the type of wood she used for the wands. Each characters wand wood reflects the character himself in a way. She was just so clever.
At this point in the story Draco suffers a slight coronary!
If it's Harry, I will personally slap him upside of his head for doing that to Draco, and permanetly label him a schmuck! HE!HE!HE!
Yeah, it's a fact of life; kids don't come with instruction booklets and let's face it, a man wouldn't bother to read the directions anyway!
Nice little 'end of the year' present!
Author's Response: Yeah, that would have scared the bejesus out of me. There will be no slapping anyone upside the head (especially me when you find out who it is) ;) I'm going to have alot of fun with Basic Baby Care 101. I hope you enjoy a few light hearted scenes I have planned for the next chapter. Have a great New Year and I'm glad you enjoyed this end of the year present.
Author's Response: You're funny. It's not Goyle. Read on, you'll find out in next chapter.;)
What a cliffhanger!
Anyone who's ever been faced with a baby and not known what to do will surely relate to this chapter! Well done.
Can't wait to see who this invader is.
Author's Response: I'm so excited I'm actually figuring out these cliffhangers. They are so fun to do! Oh the baby scenes!! So many great opportunities for some lighthearted entertainment. Who hasn't been christened by a baby boy. Lesson 1- keep mouth closed when changing baby. Lesson 2: keep cloth handy to cover baby when you take diaper off. Lesson 3: don't worry about it, that's why they make antibacterial soap. Go wash your hands a dozen times afterwords. I'm going to have a bit more fun with that in the next chapter. I hope you can relate;) The invader--who can it be? What do they want? How did they get in? These and many more questions will be answered. Read on. Thanks again for your help and your reviews.
Author's Response: I know it seemed rushed but imagine planning a wedding in less than a week! So much to do and so little time and I thought that rushed feeling should spill over to the reader. You'll find out what she told them in the next chapter. As for Ron seeking his brothers out regarding the ring. I think you will like what they put together. Ron won't go to his parents. I figured even though he would have his fathers support, he would be forced to deal with his mother again. And quite honestly, I think that one encounter was enough to last him a lifetime. Keep reading and enjoy the wedding. It's up next.
Author's Response: The one thing I've learned after the loss of my neice was that life really does go on. Sure, we mourn for our loss and wish that a twist of fate would have changed the outcome. Even wizards can't change death and their life must go on the same as ours. I wanted to relay that for all that they went through, there can still be happy times. One never knows when they might die so grab the bull by the horn and keep living. That's the one thing these boys wanted to do. Start their future. But keep reading, there are times when Harry references his many loses. He never forgets them, nor will we.
Author's Response: You know, I think you reviewed this chapter on HPFF. Since I'm still locked out, I posted to Gluttony, you validated it and I made the changes you originally suggested on HPFF. I still have to make corrections to grammar/sentence structure which someone suggested. I'm glad you liked that curse. A bit of a Slytherin trait crept into me for that one hehe. The witch equivelant for kicking someone where it counts you might say. Thanks for the review and hope you come back for more.
A lot happened in this chapter.
With respect to the opening section, I will say at the outset that it was not altogether to my taste. That is not a criticism, just a disclaimer. I will say that the first section, dealing with Draco, his family, and his newborn child, was written with great care and attention too detail.
Moving on to the next section: First, I liked the way the chapter was divided. I have a couple of comments that pertain to, basically, minutiae:
Where Harry says: "You know I can’t release that information outside of the Auror Department, Hermione." And later, where he says, "I doubt that, Hermione. Ron knows the Department rules. He'd be risking his job if he ever revealed details of an investigation," . . . "You and Ginny will just have to be happy with speculating the details over tea." This bothered me a bit, partly because, just as Harry, being an Auror, is the magical equivalent of a detective, so Hermione, being an employee of the Department of Magical Law Enforcement, is the magical equivalent of a deputy prosecuting attorney. Therefore even if Harry is under orders not to reveal the developments in a particular ongoing investigation, I would have expected his remarks to reflect her status as, in essence, an extension of his team. It may be that her opening inquiry, as well, should reflect her knowledge of the rules that govern them both. However, her inquiry ("Where have you been?") is an ordinary question that doesn’t suggest any untoward professional intrusiveness; for all she knows, he could have been at the dentist. Anyway, given her position, I would expect her to learn "secrets" of the Auror Department not through Ron but through her job as a matter of course. And I do think she would be too professional herself not to respect the boundaries he was required to maintain while working a case. In any case, although she might sometimes find herself speculating with Ginny over tea, she would be doing it as someone who was herself an "insider" and who had the same obligation to maintain the integrity of information that the Aurors do.
Between the above-quoted remarks, at the point where Hermione says, "But don’t think schmoozing will get you out of giving me a present tonight!" – I would suggest ". . . but don’t think flattery [or a synonym] will get you out of giving me a present." Harry has just paid her a complement, and she thanks him immediately before making it. So the context is that she is responding to his complement, not to schmoozing (which suggests he’s been feeding her gossip and information, chatting her up, which he really hasn’t been doing).
I emphasize that the above are small things and only matters of my own particular views.
I complement you on your plotting. I think you were right to emphasize the bonding that took place between Draco and his son; and you did a good job of setting up Ron and Hermione's situation.
Okay. I’ve deleted this review twice already because I kept finding things error in it. I’m going to try posting it again and hope it’s readable.
Author's Response: Thanks again for the review. If the first section of the chapter is not to your taste because of the somewhat uncharacteristic behavior of the Malfoy's, then let me assure you, they will get their chance to be more Slytherinish as the story progresses. There is some important information provided in that section. But you will understand more in regards to Narcissa and Lucius' behavior in the Nursery as the story continues. Sorry to be so criptic but I don't want to reveal too much. As for your comments on the 2nd half of the chapter...hmmm... how to respond without giving too much away. First off I see that you are missing some subtle clues. That is a good thing because in future chapters you will have an "AHA" moment and remember back to this point. First hint is when Hermione shouted "You're back! I was wondering if you would be in town for dinner tonight." then she asks "Where have you been?" add this statement to Harry's reflection that he hadn't seen Hermione in a couple of weeks...(when he complimented her on being a very beautiful 26 yr old) Hmmm, where has Harry been? Read on... I can see your thought process on open communication between a detective and an attorney. However, you are presuming that the Law which Hermione practices in the Magical Law Enforcement Dept relates to Harry's occupation as an Auror. Her position in the department is never outlined as criminal law. According to Lexicon she worked in the Dept. of Magical Law Enforcement where she worked to put an end to pro-pureblood laws that had been so entrenched in Wizarding society. With this in mind I didn't feel that she would be privy to information regarding any criminal investigation. I don't consider Hermione an insider in this regard. In addition, since criminal Wizards might be skilled in Legilimency, I felt it would be prudent to believe that secrecy play an important role in Wizarding detective work until said investigation or surveillance is completed. Harry's secrecy plays an important role in the future and is also reflective of what he learned through Dumbledore. At times, some secrets are very important not to reveal. I see what you mean by "schmoozing" not being the correct word to use in this context. I will make changes. I'm glad to see you discecting the story so much and returning to read on. I'm trying hard to slowly reveal little hints. Chapter 9 will open up more for you in relation to some hints which were plugged in this chapter.
I'm here to review the first chapter of your fic, as requested ^_^ I really enjoyed this opening chapter. As it is, I've always wondered how Draco would fare in America after the war. His anti-social behavior is quite in-character. I do think he would be quite humbled after the fall of Voldemort. Being in England around the victorious Harry would certainly be too much for him to handle. His parents, it seems, made the right decision to send him to the States.
I also really liked Europa's description of Draco, pairing his shyness with boyish arrogance. That certainly is Malfoy in a nutshell ;) You have a talent for expressing your characters' thoughts. I really got a sense of what they were feeling through their inner dialogue. Brava!
I only noticed a few small errors in this chapter. They are as follows.
The killing curse, sure to kill any person it was unleashed upon, but not Potter.
I think this would sound better as, The killing curse, sure to kill any person it was unleashed upon, could not touch Potter.
Potter was her only link to her son Her only son,
This should be, only link to her son, her only son,
The Dark Lord would never kill her...yet.
This should be, The Dark Lord would not kill her...yet.
Huh, maybe Dumbledore was right… Love really is a powerful magic.
This should be, Love really was a powerful magic.
He was a bit bruised and beaten but none the worse for wear.
This should be, the worse for the wear.
What fools they were to place their loyalty to a man like him.
This should be, in a man like him.
it will be along time before you will be able to lay a hand on another woman
This should be, a long time
she shouted pointing her wand at the scums midsection.
This should be, scum's midsection
Her voice shaking with fury and fright.
This should be, Her voice shook
She then exited the isle and ran down the steps, out of the Library and into the night.
This should be, exited the aisle
Draco leaned down, his wand pointed directly into the pond scums face.
This should be, the pond scum's face.
And he wasn’t prepared to learn first hand the hatred the Yanks may harbor for him.
This should be, might harbor for him.
This was a very good beginning, gnilworkj. Feel free to drop by my queue and request again. I hope you have a great week!
Best,
celticbard
;-)
What a shocking and unexpected twist, too.
Nicely done.
Author's Response: And it just so happens that I make really good homemade gravy... Very shocking twist with more twists to come. Thanks for reading.
OMG! OMG! OMG!
What the bloody hell is going on?!?!?!?!?!
RON? Why Ron?
At least Harry realized what was going to happen and got Hermione out of there.
I'm just stunned.
This is one helluva story!
Author's Response: OMG!!! Remember this is one version of the plan. I might rewrite this with my other version but I wanted to do this one first. Poor Ronald, I know but it had to happen in this plot line. I'm so glad you are liking it so far. I'm working on 9 and hope to have it done in a reasonable period so you know where I'm going here.
Really good job.
Author's Response: Even though the Malfoys are known DE, I always believed they had an enourmous love for their child just as the Potters, Weasleys etc have for theirs. They just chose the wrong path. What mother or father doesn't love their child? I thought the way Rowling's portrayed them in DH (even though she has always stated how she detests the Malfoy's character etc.) that she showed them as loving parents. Narcissa was desperate to know if her son was alive and in the castle. They both ran to find Draco rather that fight in the main hall. I even think what Draco did in the R of R was done to save his parents. It was the only route he knew which would save them. Maybe it was selfish on all their parts but isn't love sometimes selfish? Some people make the wrong kinds of decisions based on love all of the time. Narcissa knew the only way to get to her son was to make Voldy think Harry was dead. But that is also a Slytherin trait. Obtain what you need no matter how you do it. She needed to get to her son, period. Maybe it's similar to the way this generation are portrayed. "My child can do no wrong...my child is perfect..etc." I'm thinking that in some ways the Malfoys won't change, it's part of their character, but on the other hand, they were given a 2nd chance and they decided to take it. You will see more of them in the future, acting Slytherinish at times even. We'll see if I can pull it off!
This chapter starts several years after The Fall (about 7 years after)
in the first chapter, which led me to believe that these events were taking place around 2005, or 7 years later. Draco was, I believe, 17 at the time of the Battle of Hogwarts (he turned 18 the following month), so I am puzzled how he would be 19. Also, he hs obviously undertaken several years of study, and that also would take some time. So stating his age as 10 kind of threw me.
I liked the scene between Draco and Europa, and also the one with Draco and Europa's parents.
I had a little trouble with the one where he made a brief appearance before his parents, and they abrupbly left. If my kid did that, I would be frantic. (I hope he Apparated right back to England with Europa, so the Malfoys were not left to wonder what happened to him.)
The final scene was well thought out and meticulous, as well as sad. The reason I did not cry was that it was a bit abrupt and had no build up. The couple weren't even together, and they they had a baby dying in utero. It was a lot to absorb. It worked perfectly well, as narrative; but it you intended to go for emotional impact, you might have -- well, devoted a chapter to Draco and Europa and their pregnancy. But this is just a thought, which I mention only because of the author's note "Let me know if I make you cry . . .". I wanted to explain. (I'm sure other people will react quite differently.) And I don't want to detract from the quality of the chapter, which I thought was very good.
Author's Response: The scene starts out with Draco at the hospital at his wife's side following a car accident. The scene is about 7 years after the fall which would make this 2005. His flashback brings him back to when he was about 19 and met Europa. Even if he met her in the Spring of 2000 he could still be 19. I didn't mention the time of year, only that he met her when he was about 19 which would have given him about 2 years in school (taking classes during day and evening sessions and over the winter breaks and previous summer session) Since this is the wizarding world we don't really know what coursework they have but since we can presume they don't take coursework like muggles, then he can focus soley on the necessary spellwork and potions work. Since he's emersed himself totally in school as a means to hide and escape the social scene of university (as well as hide from his past) then he has been able to complete alot of necessary coursework. He met Europa in 2000 and they were together through school and up until the auto accident for 5 years. I figured this kept me in a similar timeline as outlines in her Epilogue. I hope this explains this and I hope I figured the years out properly. I didn't want to get into to much detail regarding their relationship other than to know that she truly loved him which was based on the kind of man he became rather than the way he was. I also wanted to show that no matter how hard he was on himself or how he tried to cut himself off, he found a partner in life who loved him no matter what mistakes he made and he was capable of being loved and loving back with equal ferocity. I'm planning on using details of their marraige in the form of memories in futute chapters. I'm thinking these memories will help along other situations in the story line which need to be brought forth. I hope you will agree with that the more you read. I hoped that what he said to his parents was enough of an explanation for them not to worry too much. He said he couldn't leave her and loved her etc. Narcissa knew what was going on. A mother always knows when her son is in love. I hope I answered some of your concerns. I do understand what you are saying regarding the abrubtness of Draco's story. I'm not a writer and this is a whole new thing for me to attempt. I don't know if I'm rushing but I want to get to the main story line which is Draco helping Harry. I think you will understand more when Chapter 8 gets posted
Once again, it seemed clear you had paid a lot of attention to details. In particular, the inscriptions on each person's ring was "right" and very individual.
The respective honeymoon sequences were well done and really well imagined. I could not imagine Ginny coming back to live at Grimmauld Place unless a lot of work was done; and you handled that issue really well. And you showed the mutual respect between Harry and Kreacher.
The second honeymoon, Ron's and Hermione's, was also very consistent with their characters.
My only suggestion was that I could have done without the heading "Harry and Ginny's Honeymoon," etc. I think a few extra spaces, or a horizontal bar, would have been just fine.
Author's Response: I had those headings on originally because the honeymoon was originally rated for a more mature audience and my author note had a warning. Purpleheart Beta'd out the original version and I never removed the headings. I debated on adding some of it back in, but in the end agreed with Purple that how it was revised was just enough. I'm sure everyone can use their imagination. I will work on removing that. I'm glad you liked the rings. Ginny's ring to Harry was the hardest. I had finally figured it out and posted to HPFF but made final draft directly on HPFF. Then the sight crashed and I lost my idea and couldn't remember it. Stupid me for not saving on my Word. Anyway, I was stuck on Harry's ring forever and settled on that version. The other 3 just seemed so right for them and I'm glad you agree. Kreacher and Harry's relationship will me important at times in future chapters. You will see a bit more in Chapter 8. I'm glad you liked Dumbledore's portrait. I'm trying hard to keep everyone in character. You'll see more of the portrait in Chapter 9. I hope you'll like what I plan on that.
That said, I think the chapter was nicely done. I liked that you remembered Kreacher (he'll do a fine job, I'm sure).
After giving Mrs. Weasley such a hard time in the last chapter, maybe they should all reconsider Celestina Warbeck. As a consolation prize for Mrs. W. No?
You do a great job with the details. The entire section about the Grangers being located and taken to the hospital and thence to the airport was really convincing. Because it was so well thought out, it enhanced the entire chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks- I needed to come up with a quick explanation about them hiding in Australia. That was the best I could come up with. I used to scuba dive and googled Scuba Tours in Australia. That would be a neat on to go on so I had the Granger's take the trip. Maybe someday I'll get a chance but I'm afraid of the Great Whites- Little sharks I don't mind. Big ones that can eat me...Yikes!! I know for now it's a bit fluffy but it will change into a mystery shortly. Keep reading. I'm working on some darker stuff. I hope I can pull it off.
From a narrative standpoint, I liked the way you began 7 years down the line, with Draco (around 2005, I figured), and then skipped back to pick up the story with HH&R.
Author's Response: I'm trying to stay in the timeline as best I can. I started out with that opening line in Chapter 1 and began Draco's story. Then I just had to tell my version of the wedding. The idea was too cute to pass over and I hope you liked my version. I figured I could merge the stories together in a future chapter. I have the last chapter already written and I'm just filling in the middle with a sketchy outline which I hope I can pull off. Oh yes, Mrs Weasley!! I had to have the boys stand up to her. But she can still keep George in line. Not that they don't love her, but they've done alot of growing up in DH. They weren't going to back down in their desire to marry the love of their lives and start their future. Especially Harry because remember what he desired the most...a family. Ron found his purpose and wanted to be with Hermione, Period.
I liked the set-up -- that Draco was sent off to America after the war to get him away from the unpleasantness he would face in Britain. It made a lot of sense. I also liked the retelling of Narcissa's story, and the story of how the Malfoys ended up at the end of the war. I thought you did a really nice job telling it from Narcissa's perspective. (I note that you omitted the "flashback" label. I think that was a good choice.)
I really like a lot of the background. The insurgent pockets of Dark Magic, for example; and the hints of prejudice toward Death Eaters even in the U.S., although I would like to know more about this. While I would expect the DEs to have a bad rep in the US, I'd love to know more of the specifics of how people on this side of the pond perceived them.
I liked that he met his girlfriend in the library when she was being mistreated by a jerk. (On rereading, I have to say I think the names were fine. What threw me a bit was the distinction between Minos (a king of Crete who, in mythological tradition, was a son of Europa and Zeus who, after death, became one of the judges of the dead) and Minoan (20th century name for ancient Cretan civilization). As far as names go, "Minoan," like "Julian," is a perfectly fine name. In fact, it's pretty cool.
I'd like to know why Draco decided to study what sounds like the "auror" equivalent of a criminal justice curriculum -- in other words, what Muggles who desire law enforcement careers take. This was another really interesting choice, and I'd like to know more about it.
I don't know how I failed to notice your curse the first time I read this. Crabs, eh? My thought, then, was that when you write: Then he shrieked in pain as the results of Europa’s jinx took effect -- shouldn't it be the unendurable itching that sends him shrieking.
I will be reading on.
Author's Response: I asked the artist on TDA to give the banner a sense of protection. You'll understand more as the story goes on. I thought she did a wonderful job and was really happy with it. I'm glad you looked up the jinx. I didn't expand on the meaning because I wanted people to look it up. I'll think about changing that last line around. I'm not sure if anyone else caught the meaning of the jinx (a little evil jinx on my part) and Draco agreed, a bit of evil on Europa's part. hehe. I'm glad you agreed with the names. I quickly googled Draco and read a bit on some mythology to get some good character names. The Minoans kidnapped Europa to avenge the kidnapping of Io, a princess from Argos. I thought that would work. I thought of introducing her brother, Cadmus, into the story but decided against it for reasons you'll read about later on. Wait until you meet her parents. If you know mythology then you can guess their names. I have Draco studying all those things as a means to protect himself as he is in somewhat of hiding. He has only himself to depend on right now so he needs to know how to heal himself and strongly defend himself if needed. He will need these skills to help Harry in future chapters. You'll see. You'll see more of the Malfoys and I hope you like some of how they will add to the story line here and there.
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