Both Snape and Dumbledore are well captured and in character. The idea of Snape recognizing his own tortured past in a current student is a marvelous plot idea.
My only problem was this: She began to cry. Severus’ heart broke.
Why? That's a bit rushed and somewhat out of character for Snape. Just a bit more detail, a short reminisce, would make it so much the better.
Other than that, I very much enjoyed it.
Author's Response:
Thank you, I'm glad you thought I portrayed Dumbledore and Snape well. I also see what you mean about the part I wrote being a bit rushed or writing it another way. I really appreciate you suggestion. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Albus always get the last word and he's usually right, when he's not talking in circles. The brat!
And Severus really is a good guy, as much as he'd prefer for people to think otherwise. Bless his little heart.
"All's well that ends well."
Cute little story.
Author's Response:
Glad you felt I captured Dumbledore and Snape's more positive traits. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
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