There are a few places with punctuation out of place (parent’s / parents) but other than that this is solidly written and haunting. I have a weakness for Severus & Lily stories..... but still. Thanks!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much. I'm glad you get the 70's references, yeah I agree it wasn't really addressed in the books. I really like stories that deal with that time period regarding Lily and Snape's relationship. It's great fodder for inspiration. Sorry about the typo's I'll change them. That's what happens when I don't have a beta reader look at a story first.
I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Cheers!
Short, but well done and touching. I especially liked this line: Then she looked into his face and saw eyes that had seen too much too young.
One typo? : “I can’t he,” staring at the floor. “I don’t know how.”
Other than that, just excellent. 10/10
Author's Response: can always count on a review from you BLK, thank you, you made my day. I also made the correction, thanks for catching it. I'm glad you like that line about Severus' eyes, its something that I feel comes across in the book, since they are indeed practically black.
Thanks for the read and the review. Cheers!
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