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Reviews For Jealousy Games and Deadly Consequences

Name: SiriuslyPeeved (Signed) · Date: 03/05/2009 07:43 pm · Chapter: Chapter 1: A Book, Her Thoughts and Comforting Daydreams

I'm excited to finally start your story, it's been on my "to read" list for quite a while. I love your take on Hermione's character, it's different than any I've read before. I love when she yells at the book she's reading, in canon we hardly ever see Hermione reading for pleasure. (except that all books, no matter how dry, are pleasure reading for her :) )

Hermione's thoughts about her parents are extremely interesting, how she feels pressured by them to succeed in a world they have no part in.

I do find it a little bit out of character for Head Boy and Girl to share an apartment, but I am a huge fan of AU. I will suspend my disbelief, and enjoy the story the way you've written it! :)

Hmmm, Harmony and Dramione in one story? This is going to be loads of fun! (I wonder whether Ron fits into all of this or not?)

Quibble section: please bear with me, I know you didn't request this review from me :) "Muggle" is generally capitalized. You might want to take a look at that, the next time you get a chance. I will be reading along!

Author's Response: Hello and thanks for your review on my story and for the critique as it is quite helpful. I sometimes get confused about capitalizing 'Muggle' because in some sentences it seems like a common word. Hope you enjoying reading the story!

Name: Elena (Signed) · Date: 06/04/2009 07:36 am · Chapter: Chapter 4-Sarcasm, Scuffles and Slytherin Greetings

*claps excitedly*

I love it! I love this chapter. Its awesome!!!

I KNEW I had read about those doors somewhere. I kept telling myself to go search for the storyu that had those doors, but I never found it again!! I'll not forget any time soon!!! Its a fabulous introduction to the common/dorm rooms :)

I love the Draco/Hermione interaction in this chapter. You make Draco so deliciously nasty...but..so is Hermione and I can just feel the sparks flying!!

I love their wrestling, it was cute, but also quite funny! Drakie..*giggles*...

I just LOVE this. I really wish I had a better vocab *can hear Hermione scolding me* but I don't.

Author's Response: Glad you liked the details on the doors. I really worked hard to try to set the right imagry for the common room and dorms. I know Draco was quite nasty but what else can we expect so early in the story hehehe! And Hermione, well we can see where part of her nastiness is coming from, can't we? Oh yes, the wrestling was fun to write and I couldn't resist the name 'Drakie' but Draco certainly didn't appreciate it. I appreciate all of your reviews and will be updating again soon! Thanks so much!

Name: Elena (Signed) · Date: 04/04/2009 08:31 am · Chapter: Chapter 3- Back at Hogwarts

Ahhhhh!!!!

This chapter was both exciting and frustrating. Although it is moving along slowly, you are setting up the story, the plot etc. Even the books had the mundane things in them, but this is the part about the excitement too.

We know what's coming...At least, partly. Hermione and Draco living together...Is this good or bad??...Naturally, we want them to just pounce, but that's not going to happen..at least..not yet. But soon??..hahaha

And Ginny/Blaise!!! OMG!! I love it. You know, I can see that ship having just as much passion, intrigue and excitement as much as Dramione. But I can't remember exactly what you've planned for them...but *sigh*..So exciting!!

The frustration comes from not having that Next button to click..LOL...I want more....

Bloody brilliant as always. Well, this whole story is brilliant, but as I'm going chapter by chapter...THIS IS FANTASTIC!!!! *giggles*

Author's Response: I have rewritten this chapter a bit differently than before in terms of adding more dialogue and details so I am glad that the changes were good enough to keep the story flowing. I had some issues with transitioning between the characters but I think I worked those out. Anyway, look at me, nitpicking at my own story lol! Thank you so much for another uplifting and motivating review. I am really so touched that you love reading this story as I enjoyed writing it. I know that it's tempting to have Draco and Hermione jump into each other's arms but that would be rather unlrealistic, believe me, I love these two as a couple too! And as for Ginny and Blaise, well more about what is going on with them will slowly be revealed. I really appreciate the reviews and will be updating very soon!

Name: Elena (Signed) · Date: 03/04/2009 01:46 am · Chapter: Chapter 2: Beginning of a Jealous Heart

I'm so totally sucked in to this story :) I can't even explain how or why....*thinks*...

I think right from the start, you are giving little hints to what's to come...Although I kinda know where this is heading, I have to admit, I have forgotten stuff..LOL..

Like Hermione liking Harry!! Ewww...but...awwww...

With or without that book, and again, I know that book has more to do with this story, but I can't remember what...But I would think like that anyway towards Ginny. Its an evil, evil book...

And then Drakie!! *giggles* I love it...

I loved Hermione in this chapter. I think her thoughts, even without the influence of the book, are on the ball. I also like the brave front she's giving..Its such a Hermione thing to do...

But I need more...I WANT more...hahahaha...

Author's Response: Aww thanks for reviewing again, Elena and I am so happy that you are such a fan :) Yes, those emotions and thoughts are quite normal as believe me I have had them and I too would have them towards Ginny as well. Oh yes, that name Draco hates to be called. A fun little name that makes him cringe and annoyed. Perfect weapon, huh? I know you want more and I shall give you more! I'm just trying to make sure I don't submit a bunch of terrible spelling along with the next chapter hehehe!

Name: Elena (Signed) · Date: 02/04/2009 02:54 am · Chapter: Chapter 1: A Book, Her Thoughts and Comforting Daydreams

I can't believe, after all this time...Here is your story and ITS HERE ON MY ARCHIVE!!! I feel sooooo honoured!!!

I remember reading this on HPFF, it was one of the very first Dramione fics I had read and made me fall in love with the ship.

Now, re-reading it..I remember why. You have the Draco as head boy cliche, but I think it wasn't so much a cliche at the time it was written? I don't know...I don't care...I know it works!!!

I love Hermione in this chapter, I love that its written so different. It has a different tone to it than most stories do and it just makes this story that much more superduperfantastic!!!

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Aww Thank you so much, Elena. You've always been there to support this monster story and I am more than happy to post it here on your wonderful site. At the time the Head Boy and Girl thing wasn't cliche' but that's okay. The status is just status and not really anything serious in the overall plot. Anyway, I am so happy to be here and on your wonderful site. I look forward to bringing all of my stories here for you and the wonderful people here to enjoy! *hugs* I feel so touched and wow I'm getting misty eyed. I'll update soon and thanks again for your praise and comments on my story.

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