What an absorbing little tale, with great descriptive phrasing and if it wasn't February, I'd probably had to wipe my brow in empathy . . . so, that's one little scene in what would be a line of memnories for Severus . . but not necessarily Lily.
Well done.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, especially the description. I've been trying to improve my description recently.
I think it's a perfect capture of Severus and Lily at this age. It's perfectly canon, with Sev's father, Petunia being a b**ch to Lily, and the angst of that first childhood crush that isn't returned. It's just excellent, and so very moving. 10.
Author's Response:
Thank you! ^^ I find it so hard to write children- even though I am closer in age to them than adults, they do not come naturally to me. I'm so glad you enjoyed it- I'm a canon freak :P. Thanks so much for the awesome review! :D
I love Lily/Sev :) Its so fun to write. But what you have given here is the sweet innocence that were Lily and Sev - before sides were taken and things were done that couldn't be undone. You gave these two a voice to be heard, and a start to Sev's love for Lily :)
Very well done!
Author's Response:
Aww, thank you!
I'm new to writing Lily/Sev- it's something that I most likely won't try again, but I'm glad I didn't ruin the ship or something :P. The innocence of Lily and Severus is something which greatly interests me- it's so heartbreaking that they will lose it one day. As you say, things are done that can't be undone.
Thanks so much for the lovely review! :D
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