It's not that fluffy at all. I like the interspersed "pink" here and there for the theme. It's not overdone, and goes with Teddy's powers quite well to convey his moods. I very much enjoyed it. The only thing I would suggest is a "*" between paragraphs, or a line, when there is a time jump. Other than that, it's a wonderful 10.
Author's Response:
Aw. Thank you so much. You win a prize as my first reviewer. :) This was written as a chapter for a collaboration on HPFF. I was given the color pink and this is what I came up with. I'm very glad that you enjoyed this. I'm still getting used to the formatting and controls on the submission page of this website and will certainly fix up the formatting a bit. Thanks again!
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