An intriguing idea. Exactly because Riddle was afraid of Death and spent all his life trying to conquer it.

This is a rather tricky style you have attempted, Present Tense, with a hint of "stream of consciousness". For the purpose of this story, this was the best choice.

I spotted a few small nitpicks I would correct in the text. Nothing serious, a few missing words, a few typos. If you want to, I can point them out in a separate email. Besides, I somehow felt that there was no end to the story. It shouldn't anything flashy, a sentence or two is enough, but Riddle should step through the barrier to start his Afterlife.

Afterlife is one of my favourite theme's in fanfiction. My one-shot, "He loved me, after all" ends where this story of yours start, while "Shadowlands" takes completely part in the Afterlife. Do check them out if you have some time; I'd love to hear your thoughts.

As for me, do continue with this series, please. I would love to read your take on Fred, Lupin and Tonks; the three most unnecessary deaths in Deadly Horrible (I beg your pardon, Deathly Hallows). Especially Tonks. Please consider her.

What a wonderful idea for a story . . as nobody really gives a rip what happens to old Baldie Voldie after he snuffs it, so this gives him a bit of redemption, which is what Harry told him he needed to search for as his last act . . maybe he WAS thinking about that with some part of his brain while dueling Harry . . I'm really interested in seeing where you go with this . . also makes ME think about when in MY life I was happiest . . Hummmm???

Okay: I'm sort of the resident R&R spelling/grammar/punctuation/canon nazi so here's what I found in your story . . the first sentence of the last paragraph is jumbled, like your were thinking 2 things at once and they BOTH made it onto the page . . .

‘I believe that if remember what I have tried to teach you Tom.     HUH?

And if THAT'S the only boo-boo, you're doing great!  Looking forward to the next chapter.