What a delightful look a the whole Arthurean legends starting point . . . Bravo!
Only 2 nit picky things from me ( the resident OCD reviewer )
NEVER end a sentence with a preposition! sentimental side could not let go of.
This sentence is a jumble, so shorten it and straighten out your thoughts
But I did not to be there for I had already done my part, now my part was done and it was someone else’s.
Otherwise it's REALLY good and I throughly enjoyed it!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! And for the con-crit, I really appreciate it! I don't always edit things as thoroughly as I should so I always appreciate it when readers point out errors like that so I can fix them :)
Thanks again!
-Shiloh
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