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Reviews For Catalyst

Name: datbenik513 (Signed) · Date: 12/06/2009 08:53 am · Chapter: Catalyst

Another of those "missing moments" stories I love to read so much.

You write first person, dear Taryn, as if you haven't been doing anything else. This is simply perfect, to say the least. First person is a powerful instrument to convey emotions and you've pulled it off in a wonderful way.

Sometimes we know we have it in ourselves but we need a catalyst to bring it forth. And what an unexpected catalyst we have here!

Perfect story, perfect score, powerful writing!

I really, really enjoyed it.

Zoltan

PS: A twist of fate: I have recently written a one-shot on Neville and his catalyst called "What We Believe In".

Author's Response: Zoltan, thank you so much for the wonderful review! I'll have to give your story a browse when I get a few minutes. Thanks for the compliments about the 1st person... it doesn't come as naturally to me, so I had to be careful to make sure I caught any slips into 3rd, but this story needed to be told in first person. Thanks again! :o)

Name: Holly Ilex (Signed) · Date: 02/09/2008 06:02 am · Chapter: Catalyst

"That was bloody brilliant"

I love Neville, too and this was a really good explaination of his reasoning for FINALLY standing up and becoming the wizard we all knew he was perfectly capable of being!

Boy, that was a long sentence!

I like Luna and GInny both being there for him, and Seamus. I'd forgotten that it WOULD be just Neville and Seamus left in the dorm. Odd.

Ok, I'm off to read another of your stories.TA!

HE!HE!HE!

Author's Response: I think this may just be my favorite story that I've written (as hard as it is to choose). I adore Neville, he's my hero! Thanks for reading! :o)

Name: Horcrux Stealer (Signed) · Date: 09/08/2008 06:37 am · Chapter: Catalyst

Oh my gosh, Taryn! *sniffles* I don't know what I feel right now. I am torn between sorrow for Trevor being killed and pride for Neville who handled it so bravely and turned into the Neville that we were so surprised to see in DH. I always knew he had in it him. You wrote him brilliantly. I know this story was pretty tricky to write, but you pulled it off. I love everything about it. The description, the little things that you added (they really matter), the flow and the characterization, especially of our three heroes. This story was truly inspiring. Thanks for writing Catalyst, T. The title is really suiting. Awesome job! I am adding this to my favourites.

Author's Response: YAY!! I really have a special place in my heart for Neville. I hated to kill Trevor, but something needed to trigger Neville's change and I do really think that something happening to Trevor would have been a Catalyst for it. I'm glad you liked the descriptions, I delved deep for that toad name, lol. Thanks for reading this, and woo hoo for favouriting it! Love ya! :o)

Name: lilymugwump (Signed) · Date: 02/06/2008 04:23 am · Chapter: Catalyst

Hey you're a featured author! Pretty cool... you took the challenge on and knocked this one out of the park... GREAT JOB!

Author's Response: Didn't I tell you this one was featured this month? It's cool isn't it? I'm so proud of this one, because it was a challenge, and I actually think I pulled it off! And it's really cool to see you reviewing ;o). Love ya!

Name: Jen (Signed) · Date: 30/05/2008 07:47 am · Chapter: Catalyst

I really enjoyed the idea behind this story and thought that you did a great job with your characterisations. As a first attempt at writing in first person, it was brilliant.
I have only one small query/problem and it has been bugging me since I first read you story... How is Ginny in the same class as Neville and Luna? I've read the other reviews and no-one else mentioned this, so I was wondering if I missed something???

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. As for the question, it's a good one...Luna according to Order of the Phoenix is in Ginny's year, so it would not be unusual for them to be in the same class. As for Neville being in the same class as Ginny and Luna...I took a little creative license there. My guess is that with so many people not returning to Howarts that year, that they probably would have combined some of the classes. At least, that's what I did for the purposes of this story. Thanks for asking, I hope that helps clear things up. :o)

Name: morgana (Signed) · Date: 16/05/2008 01:59 pm · Chapter: Catalyst

This is a very original story. The Fat Lady and sir Codogan were really funny. I think you do a very good job with the first person.

This story is a mixture or romantic inuendo, sadness and determination. I like that the end is a bit vague. I wa at the beginning under the impression that Neville fancied Ginny a bit but then nothing is said one way or another. I think it's nice to keep the reader wondering...

Very well done, sad and entertaining at the same time!

Author's Response: Thank you! I made some Neville/Luna inferences at the beginning of the story, but knowing that they don't end up together, I didn't put too much of it in there. Thank you so much for reading, and reviewing. It's hard not to be slightly original when you have The Fat Lady and Sir Cadogan together, lol...of course, I can't take credit for that ship ;o).

Name: Labby (Signed) · Date: 14/05/2008 09:43 pm · Chapter: Catalyst

Hehe.. this was a great story! I love that you used Neville and his search for Trevor.. his death kind of reminds me of Hedwig's death in DHs, and I think JKR said something about that death was when the innocence and childhood was taken out of the stories. This being a catalyst for Neville doing what he did in DHs completely makes sense because of that - I really liked how that was done. Great job with this!

Author's Response: Gosh, I cried so hard when Hedwig died. And you're right there's a change that happens when those that are truly innocent, like Trevor and Hedwig get caught in the crossfire. I'm glad you think it made sense. Thanks for reading! I'll be checking out Dogs and Dragons soon! :o)

Name: JLHufflepuff (Signed) · Date: 14/05/2008 04:31 am · Chapter: Catalyst

I LOVE this glimpse into what pushed Neville over the edge into fighting back against the status quo. I think having Trevor be killed is seriously a realistic catalyst to do so. I mean, sometimes the small things are what show us more about the big things, right? I really enjoyed reading it from Neville's perspective. I don't know that I've ever read a first-person neville story. I think you did a great job with the tense and point of view! :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm so proud of this story. I thought and thought about it, and when I finally came up with the idea to kill Trevor (mainly because I couldn't bear to kill a human), it all just fell into place. I've only ever written first person when writing a personal narrative, so this was quite a stretch for me. I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for reviewing! :o)

Name: NevillesSoulmate (Signed) · Date: 07/05/2008 11:23 pm · Chapter: Catalyst

Taryn! You killed Trevor?!?! I don't know if I can forgive you... ; ) Honestly, though, this was a fantastic, fantastic, fantastic story. I loved how you wrote it from Neville's point of view, I think that makes the story. And Luna was great. I loved her theories about the... South American Evanescing Toad (I had to go back and check to make sure I didn't screw up the name like Neville ;)). Great job!

Author's Response: I know, I know...Trevor, may he RIP. I didn't want to, but I needed something that would push Neville over the edge, and I *was* challenged to write a murder mystery. I had fun with that S. American Evanescing Toad, and Neville screwing it up, at least until he needed to get it right. So glad you found some time to read it, thanks for leaving a review! I hope you're feeling better. :o)

Name: andharrywokeup (Signed) · Date: 07/05/2008 10:55 am · Chapter: Catalyst

Taryn...in school right now, but you know how it goes - anything to procrastinate. This won't be a whopper andy-review because the bell is about to ring, but I really just wanted to let you know how much I loved this. A truly beautiful piece! You've really managed to get inside Neville's head and I can't wait to see what the others come up with for the Gryffie project. If they are even half as good as this, we'll be onto a winner! Also, congrats of doing Gubby's crazy challenge so well - far better than me who just laughed and refused to work with it. this is sheer brilliance, love. Very well done!

Author's Response: I bow to the queen of procrastination! Thank you so much for reading (although, the teacher in me would be remiss if I didn't say you really shouldn't read while in school. 'course I pop in from time to time when I get the chance ;o) I was ready to strangle Gubby when I first saw the challenge, I mean Fadogan? But I wanted to prove to her (and more importantly, myself) that I could do something different, so I took it and made it my own. I'm so glad you think I did it well. *huggles* :o)

Name: Ford the Prefect (Signed) · Date: 06/05/2008 10:13 pm · Chapter: Catalyst

Another fine story, Taryn. You know, JKR did a great job of generating interest in Neville, but then I think she fell flat. On the other hand, I honestly believe that you have added to his story, and you've done a wonderful job with it. And I agree with juls in that you've characterized Neville and Luna very well. You should write more Luna; you're better at it than you think. And if you need any pointers from a real live loon, just let me know. :)

You have an excellent sense for missing moments and character backgrounds. If I ever realize my ambition of creating a Harry Potter televeision series, I hope you'll let me use some of your stories.

Doug

Author's Response: I didn't know you wanted to create an HP television series...how cool would that be? If you ever make it happen, you're welcome to use my stories, for a cut, lol. I agree that JKR could have done so much more with Neville, but she could have done more with so many of the characters. Just imagine how long the books would have been though if she'd given all of her wonderful characters more of a look. And it gives us fanfiction writers a chance to really examine these characters that she created. Thanks so much for reading! :o)

Name: potterverse (Signed) · Date: 06/05/2008 08:51 pm · Chapter: Catalyst

Wow! This is absolutely my favorite story that you have written. It is very difficult to pull off first person writting well (I've never even attempted it). You did a superb job. I also loved how you portrayed Luna. You have an excellent sense of her character (and she's an elusive person to begin with). Not to mention the wicked hard challenge. I am never going to ask Gubby for a challenge. So all in all, well done. Bravo!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Ginny! I'm working on Luna...she's a tough nut to crack, erm...write. I can't tell you how much it means to me that you think I've done her well. It was a difficult challenge, but honestly, I really enjoyed it, but if you ever take on a Gubby challenge do NOT ask for specifics...oi! She'll back you into a corner with them, lol. Thanks for reading! :o)

Name: serendip (Signed) · Date: 05/05/2008 12:59 am · Chapter: Catalyst

Gorgeous. First time in first person? Absolutely wonderful. Except for the part when Trevor died. :( You killed a toad! How heartless can you be? Just joking. It's Gubby's fault for making you kill someone/thing. Neville was characterized wonderfully, of course. And Evanscing Toad? I laughed out load then. So...Luna! Brilliant job bTaryn, 10/10.

Author's Response: Thanks, Ali! I channeled my inner Luna to come up with that...and used a thesaurus to come up with Lunaesque synonyms for vanishing, lol. I did bounce that one around in the c-box a bit and it seemed to be a hit ;o). Heartless? Somebody has to die in a murder mystery. I couldn't bring myself to murder a person, and as I've said before, I felt that Neville needed a push to bring out his leadership qualities. Thanks for reading, love! :o)

Name: Gubby (Signed) · Date: 05/05/2008 12:56 am · Chapter: Catalyst

Delightful and tear-jerking (outside my own allergies :P). Absolutely stunning job, Taryn! *glomps* I mean, it was genius, actually. Who would've thought you kill Trevor of all people - or toads?! I was shocked. But yeah, excellent job. Like juls said, your characterizations were perfect. Neville, Luna, Ginny, even Carrow and McGonagall. And how can I forget my favorite portrait? *grins ecstatically* You wrote him splendidly. It made me grin ridiculously, seeing them together and the swish of the horse's tail in the beginning, I was like :o *squeeee* And then they were "occupied" and "I didn't know portraits could shag." PRICELESS, plus it's so very Ginny to say that. And then, on the more serious note... an excellent examination of Neville's character. This is an aptly named, smartly-written Fadogan murder mystery and... squee! I love it!!! *glomps* Definitely lived up to my expectations! *glomps again*

Author's Response: Yay!!!! Yours was the opinion I wanted above all. I'm so glad you liked my Fadogan...because that is NOT an easy ship to write, LOL. I'm still not sure I had enough of it in there. And it broke my heart to lose Trevor, but something had to send Neville over the edge. I'm so glad I finally have this done, and I'm so pleased that you liked it! *hugglesquishglomptackle*! :o)

Name: juls (Signed) · Date: 05/05/2008 12:04 am · Chapter: Catalyst

This was delightful... I love how you've characterized Neville and Luna in this. So very in character. Great job dear.

~~juls

Author's Response: Thanks juls! I feel like Neville is coming more and more easily to me (especially now that I've been inside his head, lol), Luna is still a challenge, LOL. :o)

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