Really you had be catapulting from grinning with sheer happiness to almost in tears the way I always end up when reading LJs. I sometimes think that the happier a fic is, the sadder it'll make it, because their entire story is just so heartbreaking. :'(
What I especially liked about this fic was the dialogue - you got it perfect. There are so many romance stories where either the couple end up sounding platonic, or they end up sounding way over the top. Your's was so natural and this was really aided by your fantastic characterisation. Their reactions to everything were again, perfect.
So, like I said, I refuse to believe that this started off as something you made up on the spot. It's such a fantastic piece of writing! :D You are amazing. xx x x xx
~ Oh and 10/10, obviously. I'd give you more if I could!
Author's Response:
hehehe...Believe it, cause it was. Once Gubby wanted what I wrote in the cbox, turned into a full story...the rest just came to me. I'm happy with this story, not just because you girls inspired it, but, in a way, I hoped it has shown you that you can break the 'mould' and be different. You can control how things happen in a story and especially with the Marauders , because there is still so much about them that we don't know about.
Not everyone will like what you do, but as a writer, I don't see why you should limit yourself, especially when writing fan fiction. We are given the chance to explore possibilities, to look beyond what the original author, JKR, produced and make a world of our own to escape in. In this case, we now see that a man doesn't always have to be the one to propose :)
ZOMFGSQUEEEEEEE! I really helped inspire this? I did? *bows down* but before I go all fangirly on your *fangirls* I must review the story!
You, my dear, are a fantastically fantabulously AWESOME writer and I love this piece to DEATH. It's very rare you find a Hogwarts fic with James and Lily being together already, and I love it because you don't have all the clichéd arguing and then falling in love stuff :D You portray their relationship beautifully, they are so adorable and yet so ... mature? Your Lily is a great, well-rounded character and she seems so realistic without having typical Lily-characteristics and therefore she's a fabulous non-clichéd girl. I love her. And oh! your James! I mean awwww! I have just fallen in love with him right there ;) He's so witty, charming and hilarious, just as he should be. You have SO done him justice and I am enormously glad of that because I am a total James fangirl!
And then your angsty bit in the middle - I mean, wow. James' emotions were so raw, I just wanted to cry for him. And Lily ... you have created for them this absolutely fantastic, romantic relationship with that underlying suggestion of the pain they're going to experience in their future, in James' grieving. It's wonderful, and heartbreaking! And of course your Sirius was perfect, his anger so sad and so real. And I love the way you have Peter as a proper part of their 'gang', sharing in their grief and his own. You've got such a range of emotions in here, and every one of them portrayed fantastically, Elena.
And then that ending! Oh, my! It was absolutely GORGEOUS! I think it was this line which really made me go .... EEEEEEEEEE-AWWW-SQUEEEEE ... It was about love, something so pure and so mutually felt that nothing could touch it or destroy it. It was such a hopeful, beautiful ending to all that sadness.
I am just in love with this one, Elena. It's stunning. 10/10, if you hadn't guessed ;)
Gorgeous characterization, heartbreakingly amazing emotions, spot-on dialogue, plot worthy of tears, and a climax of revolutionary proportions! LILY proposing to JAMES! Unheard of... but it feels so right. I'm in love. LOVE! Did I mention your James is SO attractive and so devoted to Lily, it makes my heart ache and it makes me smile so much. You're amazing. Elena, someday I'll review your stories and be actually coherent, but today is NOT that day! LMAO I am completely totally in LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE with this! *SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE*
10/10 and a massive huggleglompsquishtackle for you! *huggleglompsquishtackles Elena*
Author's Response:
Oh Gubby!!!
I think at this rate, you will beat me at any Best Fan Girl Reviewer!!
Thank you so much, but yes, you helped to inspire this entire thing. Besides the part that I wrote in the cbox, the rest was planned around that part :)
I loved writing this, it did bring me to a few tears, but overall, I'm happy with it *hugs* Thank you for helping to inspre me to write.Disclaimer: This site is a place to host Harry Potter Fan Fiction, The Vampire Diaries Fan Fiction, Twilight Fan Fiction, Original Fiction, Original Poetry, Drabbles and RPG (Role Playing Game) Fan Fiction. This is a not for profit site and is in no way connected to or endorsed by J. K. Rowling, Scholastic Books, Bloomsbury Publishing, Hachette Book Group USA, Summit Entertainment or Warner Brothers. All Twilight Characters/places/settings are copyrighted to Stephenie Meyer. The Vampire Diaries Books and characters/places therein are the property of L.J. Smith and HarperCollins. The Vampire Diaries TV Series is copyright to the CW Network and Alloy. The Dresden Files/Codex Alera is copyright Jim Butcher. These stories are licensed under the Creative Commons as derivative, noncommercial fiction. All other works of Fan Fiction are copyright to the original creators and no copyright infringement is intended. The original characters and plots are the property of the author and may not be borrowed or copied without permission. No money is being made from this work. No copyright infringement is intended. TOS, Submission Rules, etc., are property of site admin. Gluttony has been open since 14/02/08.
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