Keep this one up, you're doing fine. It's getting better and better. I like how it's gone to the Burrow now. Ron's reaction, I'm sure, will be less than serence...heheh

Interesting take, once again. You have to wonder how it would work in the States - Grand Central Station, NY, or a bunch of smaller ones going somewhere, given the size of the USA? I like this chapter, although a few more tiny details could really spruce it up.

Well, that revelation had to be coming, didn't it? I like how Hermione took Elroy around and showed him what had happened. I would imagine that the Americans would have had very little, if only propaganda type info, on what was happening. Nice bit with the owls vs. phones, too. That made sense, although the tech would have limited use areas, I think. Your last line was great for closing this chapter, too.

The only problem I have with this is (other Harry being able to accomplish Legillimency) is his use of it without asking Hermione, or using it by force on someone he's disarmed. I don't know if this is foreshadowing or not, but it just doesn't seem right. Other than than, no complaints.

Interesting twist with the uncle. Thought I saw that one coming! I also like the bit with the dad having 'played wizards' and jumped off the roof. Foreshadowing?

This is interesting, but it's a bit rushed. "Take the memory," with no explanation or discussion. I find it hard to believe it would go that fast. This is one chapter that you should probably expand on, as the premises here are so full of potential.

We often have to wonder what happened to some of the canon characters, before we 'met' them in the books. This is an area wide open to exploration, and I think this a good premise for Hermione.

I liked this chapter. It was very refreshing to meet Elroy, he sounded so nice. Was also sad since he had to move away and that promise they made...wow, so young...and yet heartfelt. I'm interested to see where this goes :)